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7/11/2011 c2 472Angel N Darkness
you did a great job on this chapter... love it... update soon...
7/8/2011 c2 31TwilightPony21
Oh, I think that was a very nice opener with Identity.

I liked this line a lot: "This is going to take some getting used to." "What? Wanting to live again?"

I can see Callen wondering why he does what he does in his search for identity. Sort of wondering what drives him in his job and what it would mean to have Kensi doing the same thing by his side. Not sure if that makes sense, but I hope you understand what I’m trying to say.

I also like the little snippet style so far, and I think it will work out well for the story. I’m glad the bunnies like it, too. Many thanks also to you for writing this story!
7/8/2011 c2 always.theheartbeat
Very nice! Even though we don't generally see Callen's softer and more caring side, so we don't know just what he'd do in certain situations, I think this was perfectly Callen of him.

And Kensi was totally sweet! I know that's a word that's really hardly ever used to describe her, but I mean, really. I like that she and Callen can talk about what's going on with them.

Also, I like the last line. I think it's the way it was worded, or something, but whatever it was, it made me smile.

Again, awesome!
7/8/2011 c2 72E Salvatore
A sweet, quaint chapter that checks all the romance boxes. It's going to be interesting to see you take Callen from where he was in the previous fic to someone who isn't eager to die at any given moment. It was really cute and sweet how he just had to grab her while she was walking by; reassuring himself, maybe? Good thing Kensi didn't go all ninja on him. Love love love the last line. Say hi to the bunnies and tell them I'll leave them a hundred reviews if it means you'll keep writing! xoxo, E.
7/8/2011 c2 Libbyjkg
just great, really loving how this story is going even after only 2 chapters can not wait for the next chapter (hoping that it will be soon)
7/7/2011 c2 3alix33
I liked the conversation Kensi and Callen had.
7/2/2011 c1 472Angel N Darkness
awwww... love this chapter... you did a great job on it... love it... update soon...
7/2/2011 c1 72E Salvatore
Oh, so the bunnies ARE back.

YAY YAY YAY I HAVE BEEN WAITING FOR THIS LIKE, FOREVER! (Okay, not really. But close enough.)

Cute little scene of them being normal at home. It's nice to see that you didn't just jump ahead to years from now where everything's good, because that would totally have been, you know, easier and less challenging - but so totally not you. Because you can actually write this fic without cutting to the future! (Not many can.) I mean, I'm so not good at building their relationship. Which is why I leave that to talented people like you.

I think everyone loves the little 'your house; close enough to yours too' bit, so 'nuff said there.

Callen - it is totally Hetty. I can tell you that right now. LOL. Hetty being Hetty, and you writing Hetty - it's just great. And makes for a great read too! Because I dont't think everyones always get her right - I know I don't. That's why she's mostly senile when it's up to me. But you write her just right, that perfect balance between mysterious-all-knowing-ninja and authority figure. I think. I'm not so sure of what I'm trying to say here. Or rather, I can't articulate my thoughts. Bottom line - I love the way you write Hetty.

Also loving how they're not totally just physical and stuff. Because OF COURSE some relationships turn 'just physical' when the emotional stuff gets hard. (Those are the ones that will never work out. I wish I'd known that earlier.) So, definitely happy with how you're writing them taking it slow and all.

"Yes, sharing your home with me has been such an awful experience for you hasn't it."

- This is ALL Callen. It's got him written all over it. And yay for affectionate punches!

So I promised you a really long review, but I think 1600/1700 words should be enough before I start to hurt your eyes/ramble/go random.

All you need to know is : I LOVE THIS FIC. AND YOU. And I am so proud - or maybe humbled - actually, just plain HAPPY that this is part of my lil' SWBI. Yeah, I think I'm going with 'proud'. (happy tear)

xoxo,

E.
7/2/2011 c1 redmangan23gmail.com
its so good to see a Callen and Kensi story up again. As much as I like Deeks character I just cant see him and Kensi being anything other than very good friends and partners.

So thank you for bringing a a good story line back to the board
7/1/2011 c1 Libbyjkg
This chapter is great, keep up the good work can not wait to read more.
7/1/2011 c1 31TwilightPony21
Welcome back to you and the plot bunnies! So great to see the start of this story!

Loved this part because it sounded so much like all three of them: "You going to answer that?" "Your house." … "I'm betting it's Hetty." Kensi opened the door and there was Hetty. … “Why would I when I knew that you were both here?”

I loved how you wrote Hetty here. It’s so like her to know exactly where both of her agents are, show up mysteriously, and lay out the problem but bend the rules for her team in the unique way that she always does – to give them a chance, because I think she always wants to give them all a chance. (I have no idea if that all made sense, but I hope so!)

Thanks so much for starting this Callen/Kensi story – very much looking forward to seeing how the snippets play out!

(I just realized that I didn’t have you on author alert – silly me!)
7/1/2011 c1 3alix33
"So, the bunnies have been dragged back from their extended vacation" - So, where DO plot bunnies go on their hols? And what do they do once they are there?

"Kensi jumped at little at the knock on the door that brought her out of her musings. Callen raised an eyebrow and smirked. She stuck her tongue out at him. "You going to answer that?" she asked. Callen shook his head. "Your house." "Close enough to yours too." "Not officially. I still 'live' in that little motel room." "Tell that to my fridge," Kensi retorted as she pulled her feet out of his lap and stood up." - So, what burden did/does G place upon (or even in) Kensi's fridge, that she could say that?

"There was another knock on the door. An insistent, determined one. "I'm betting it's Hetty." Callen stood up as well." - Or somebody from Team Hetty (if in the NCIS:DC/HQ-verse there can be a Team Gibbs, surely there can be a Team Hetty in the NCIS: LA-verse?).

"I should split you up. Team mates in a relationship together do not tend to work out for the best for either situation." "Hetty," Kensi started but Hetty held up her hand to stop her. "I am not going to do so. I am giving you a chance to prove that the two of you are professional enough to work together, giving you a chance to prove that you are not two typical, average agents. Now Sam, Eric, Nate and myself already know of this relationship and that is how it is to stay. Director Vance does not and I do not intend on telling him." - I think Hetty should give director Vance more credit that what she is currently.

"Mr Callen you have alias's that you need to keep up." - "you have aliases".
7/1/2011 c1 always.theheartbeat
I cannot even begin to explain, but this came at the perfect time. I was just begining to feel bad cause all I've seen lately are updates about couples I do NOT support.

But then, this pops up in my email, and I'm like: Yes!

So anyway. First off, I'm glad you had Hetty give them that talk - cause really. She's the type of boss that would give them that, and most people skip over that, but it's kinda necessary. Also I like the ending where Kensi's describing how it is living with Callen - it's really amusing.

Annnd I'm glad to see that the two of them aren't totally falling over eachother. They obviously care for one another and such, but in their situation, they gotta take it slow so they can figure things out and not mess up, and you didn't skip over that, either. :D Which is good.

Awesome start! I'm excited for this!
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