for Kindred7/14/2012 c1 ultragashinferno
Hey I liked a lot your FF, can I (try to) translate it in italian?
I'll credit you, of course ; w ;
Hey I liked a lot your FF, can I (try to) translate it in italian?
I'll credit you, of course ; w ;
6/18/2012 c1 
2Golden Chow-Chow
yo i really like this story great job :D
please make more
i'm dying to read more :D
2Golden Chow-Chowyo i really like this story great job :D
please make more
i'm dying to read more :D
7/22/2011 c1 3x0SilverFeathersx0
Daang, this was very good to read! First, I must compliment your description of the scenery. With the bits of information you gave us, I was able to imagine the environment quite well in my head. All the way from the sand dunes to the moon-kissed sea which glimmered in the distance. I've been looking for some good scenery descriptions to study from, and your choice of words enlightened me greatly. (: also I enjoyed how you portayed Sabrina and Morty here. I feel as though you've captured Sabrina's persona wonderfully, with her mild manners and need for peace and tranquility. Morty himself seemed like a chilled out, relaxed guy, and I could clearly imagine them acting in such a way. I could definitely see how they could work out as a couple, and again, this was an awesome read. Thank you very much for writing this ^_^
3x0SilverFeathersx0Daang, this was very good to read! First, I must compliment your description of the scenery. With the bits of information you gave us, I was able to imagine the environment quite well in my head. All the way from the sand dunes to the moon-kissed sea which glimmered in the distance. I've been looking for some good scenery descriptions to study from, and your choice of words enlightened me greatly. (: also I enjoyed how you portayed Sabrina and Morty here. I feel as though you've captured Sabrina's persona wonderfully, with her mild manners and need for peace and tranquility. Morty himself seemed like a chilled out, relaxed guy, and I could clearly imagine them acting in such a way. I could definitely see how they could work out as a couple, and again, this was an awesome read. Thank you very much for writing this ^_^
7/22/2011 c1 x0SilverFeathersx0
Daang, this was very good to read! First, I must compliment your description of the scenery. With the bits of information you gave us, I was able to imagine the environment quite well in my head. All the way from the sand dunes to the moon-kissed sea which glimmered in the distance. I've been looking for some good scenery descriptions to study from, and your choice of words enlightened me greatly. (: also I enjoyed how you portayed Sabrina and Morty here. I feel as though you've captured Sabrina's persona wonderfully, with her mild manners and need for peace and tranquility. Morty himself seemed like a chilled out, relaxed guy, and I could clearly imagine them acting in such a way. I could definitely see how they could work out as a couple, and again, this was an awesome read. Thank you very much for writing this ^_^
Daang, this was very good to read! First, I must compliment your description of the scenery. With the bits of information you gave us, I was able to imagine the environment quite well in my head. All the way from the sand dunes to the moon-kissed sea which glimmered in the distance. I've been looking for some good scenery descriptions to study from, and your choice of words enlightened me greatly. (: also I enjoyed how you portayed Sabrina and Morty here. I feel as though you've captured Sabrina's persona wonderfully, with her mild manners and need for peace and tranquility. Morty himself seemed like a chilled out, relaxed guy, and I could clearly imagine them acting in such a way. I could definitely see how they could work out as a couple, and again, this was an awesome read. Thank you very much for writing this ^_^
7/2/2011 c1 zflame393
Don't be so hard on yourself, I've never read anything that you have written that wasn't interesting. The best part was when Sabrina thought that it was "strangely flattering" that Morty let her read his mind. It just seemed like those two words provided the perfect description for that unexpected plot twist.
** Rheum is a synonym for sleep (the stuff that gets in your eye). So, if you were ever curious about the official name, there you go.
Speaking of Sabrina, MangaShipping happens to be one of my favorites. However, I think Brock and Elesa would be interesting together as well.
Don't be so hard on yourself, I've never read anything that you have written that wasn't interesting. The best part was when Sabrina thought that it was "strangely flattering" that Morty let her read his mind. It just seemed like those two words provided the perfect description for that unexpected plot twist.
** Rheum is a synonym for sleep (the stuff that gets in your eye). So, if you were ever curious about the official name, there you go.
Speaking of Sabrina, MangaShipping happens to be one of my favorites. However, I think Brock and Elesa would be interesting together as well.
7/1/2011 c1 Widdiful Echidna
This was nice. Sabrina tends to be a character with many personalities as far as fan fiction goes, but this Sabrina seemed a lot like she was in the game, not too quiet, but reserved, and, you know, not all, 'ha, I'm going to turn you into a doll right now because you annoy me'. So... Yeah, good job!
This was nice. Sabrina tends to be a character with many personalities as far as fan fiction goes, but this Sabrina seemed a lot like she was in the game, not too quiet, but reserved, and, you know, not all, 'ha, I'm going to turn you into a doll right now because you annoy me'. So... Yeah, good job!
7/1/2011 c1 4Abare Tosanami
This was refreshing.
Like when you have a bad taste in your mouth and you take a big gulp of orange juice to overpower the taste, leaving you refreshed and mentally aware never to eat day old food.
It was simple, just a conversation between two people who happen to understand each other. For that and the way you portray their characters, it just helps build up a genuine chemistry that you can't help but enjoy reading.
Thank you for the read.
4Abare TosanamiThis was refreshing.
Like when you have a bad taste in your mouth and you take a big gulp of orange juice to overpower the taste, leaving you refreshed and mentally aware never to eat day old food.
It was simple, just a conversation between two people who happen to understand each other. For that and the way you portray their characters, it just helps build up a genuine chemistry that you can't help but enjoy reading.
Thank you for the read.
7/1/2011 c1 NEXTviestith
I rather liked it; don't be so hard on yourself. XD The only thing I have to say as far as a "mistake" goes is this:
{The ocean is even closer here, the breeze making her feel like she is part of it.}
This isn't wrong, by any means, but somehow saying, "making" instead of "makes" feels more past tense than present, but there's a good possibility I'm just not used to present tense writing. It's difficult stuff to write, so not many people do it, and those who do rarely do it successfully. Still, I feel like you did more than an adequate job with this, and I didn't feel anyone was out of character.
Nice work. :)
I rather liked it; don't be so hard on yourself. XD The only thing I have to say as far as a "mistake" goes is this:
{The ocean is even closer here, the breeze making her feel like she is part of it.}
This isn't wrong, by any means, but somehow saying, "making" instead of "makes" feels more past tense than present, but there's a good possibility I'm just not used to present tense writing. It's difficult stuff to write, so not many people do it, and those who do rarely do it successfully. Still, I feel like you did more than an adequate job with this, and I didn't feel anyone was out of character.
Nice work. :)