for Sirius's Legacy11/21/2011 c4 
4The Lone Clapper
Great chapter!
I don't really have any critique for you here... Just... um... try to add more detail... You didn't have much of a problem with this, but you can ALWAYS add more details! It makes your writing even better. = )
Update soon! = D
~The Clapper
4The Lone ClapperGreat chapter!
I don't really have any critique for you here... Just... um... try to add more detail... You didn't have much of a problem with this, but you can ALWAYS add more details! It makes your writing even better. = )
Update soon! = D
~The Clapper
11/19/2011 c3 The Lone Clapper
Good chapter! Still can't wait to find out why Ashten shrinks...
I don't really have any constructive criticism for this chapter besides grammar. They were all really minor, but I would still recommend rereading your writing in order to catch them. = )
And now for chapter 4!
~The Clapper
Good chapter! Still can't wait to find out why Ashten shrinks...
I don't really have any constructive criticism for this chapter besides grammar. They were all really minor, but I would still recommend rereading your writing in order to catch them. = )
And now for chapter 4!
~The Clapper
11/19/2011 c2 The Lone Clapper
Ooh... interesting...
I wonder why Ashten shrinks like that... Hmm... Speaking of which, Ashten is a cool name. = )
I don't really have any constructive crtisism for this chapter. I just gotta read the next one!
And until my next review:
¡Adios! (Tee hee isn't that cool? I can do it on my iPod touch... anyway...)
~The Clapper
Ooh... interesting...
I wonder why Ashten shrinks like that... Hmm... Speaking of which, Ashten is a cool name. = )
I don't really have any constructive crtisism for this chapter. I just gotta read the next one!
And until my next review:
¡Adios! (Tee hee isn't that cool? I can do it on my iPod touch... anyway...)
~The Clapper
11/19/2011 c1 The Lone Clapper
This seems pretty good so far. = )
Aside from, like, two grammar mistakes (not a big problem), the only critique I really have for you is to add a little more detail. And that Harry wouldn't know what a Secret Keeper is back when he was 11...
Nonetheless, this seems good so far! Off to the next chapter! = D
~The Clapper
This seems pretty good so far. = )
Aside from, like, two grammar mistakes (not a big problem), the only critique I really have for you is to add a little more detail. And that Harry wouldn't know what a Secret Keeper is back when he was 11...
Nonetheless, this seems good so far! Off to the next chapter! = D
~The Clapper
7/24/2011 c4 Amy
Very inventive. Good use of new characters and old. I am looking forward to Ashten's use of her small stature. I am sure it will come to good use. You would have to tie her to a tiny post for when she gets small she will be able to run away.
Nice that Hermione finally has a female friend.
Very inventive. Good use of new characters and old. I am looking forward to Ashten's use of her small stature. I am sure it will come to good use. You would have to tie her to a tiny post for when she gets small she will be able to run away.
Nice that Hermione finally has a female friend.
7/8/2011 c3 Hi
I love ur story and u really need to write more! It's amazing! I'm not so sure about the shrinking thing though...I hope that won't always happen... :/ sorry it's like one of the only things I don't really like but it's ur story and I really do like it!
I love ur story and u really need to write more! It's amazing! I'm not so sure about the shrinking thing though...I hope that won't always happen... :/ sorry it's like one of the only things I don't really like but it's ur story and I really do like it!
7/7/2011 c3 Hi
Please hurry and write more! I just started reading it and it's amazing hurry and write more!
Please hurry and write more! I just started reading it and it's amazing hurry and write more!
7/6/2011 c3 Inactive Night
Awwww, so im confused the the Tommy,And voldemort and death eaters still...
Awwww, so im confused the the Tommy,And voldemort and death eaters still...
7/5/2011 c3 3Live-Life-Louder
Absolutely love it! Keep up the good work. I'd like too see how close Harry and Ashton get. I can see they need each other. They kinda remind me of some people I know. they were related but never met until they started high school. Their dads are brothers but hate each other, but they grew up withouttheir moms, and it caused them to have a strong sibling bond. Now, they are inseperable.
Update soon...It is getting good.
3Live-Life-LouderAbsolutely love it! Keep up the good work. I'd like too see how close Harry and Ashton get. I can see they need each other. They kinda remind me of some people I know. they were related but never met until they started high school. Their dads are brothers but hate each other, but they grew up withouttheir moms, and it caused them to have a strong sibling bond. Now, they are inseperable.
Update soon...It is getting good.
7/5/2011 c2 wannabedivasoprano
I like the part where the hat was bored. JK was such a genius in her characters! The paintings, the hat, the animals. You have a great imagination too. Keep up the great work!
I like the part where the hat was bored. JK was such a genius in her characters! The paintings, the hat, the animals. You have a great imagination too. Keep up the great work!