
7/16/2011 c2
21The Damned Goddess
Very good story, I like the idea of Xander being a forth Halliwell, but maybe you can try to break from the script a little more then just adding Xander in there. Following exactly what the show does gets boring, because, let's face it, everybody here had already seen Charmed and knows what happened in the show, so mix it up a bit. Add Buffy and Willow or something, or put in extra little twists. And try to add more detail, because just talking gets way boring. In the show, it's OK, because you SEE what's going on, but in a book or story, not so OK.

Very good story, I like the idea of Xander being a forth Halliwell, but maybe you can try to break from the script a little more then just adding Xander in there. Following exactly what the show does gets boring, because, let's face it, everybody here had already seen Charmed and knows what happened in the show, so mix it up a bit. Add Buffy and Willow or something, or put in extra little twists. And try to add more detail, because just talking gets way boring. In the show, it's OK, because you SEE what's going on, but in a book or story, not so OK.