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7/27/2011 c1 Thousand Wings
What's with the " line"?

I don't get it.
7/13/2011 c1 JCX
Not bad but I definitely think that you should've put more detail in the... well all of it.

But there are also some inconsistencies here. The 'loose souls' were released from their seal in the incident with Keima and Tenri when they young. Demons probably had no reason to be on (the surface) of Earth for no reason nor would a contract (regarding the capture of loose souls) would be made.

Oh and I wouldn't exactly say that demons are immortal, since Haqua did die here.
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