for Blurred8/24/2011 c3 shrutip
EVERYTHING about this whole story is really good...and as everyone else said, this is amazing for a first attempt. The boys are perfectly in character...and the whole story is sort of going backwards, but it makes perfect sense even that way. One more chapter would be great! All the best for more fanfiction! :)
EVERYTHING about this whole story is really good...and as everyone else said, this is amazing for a first attempt. The boys are perfectly in character...and the whole story is sort of going backwards, but it makes perfect sense even that way. One more chapter would be great! All the best for more fanfiction! :)
8/24/2011 c3 
18ray4ruffles
i am so excited you decided to keep going- this is brilliant, and i love reading it! i keep reading the previous chapters and finding new parts i love (but they don't let you review the same chapter twice). i especially love how you cover the same track of time from two completely different mindsets- not just peter and neal, but a whole "order and chaos" mentality. it's amazing, and fluid, and cohesive both separately and as a whole, which is really impressive given the incohesive state you're writing. update soon- i can't wait for the next chapter!
18ray4rufflesi am so excited you decided to keep going- this is brilliant, and i love reading it! i keep reading the previous chapters and finding new parts i love (but they don't let you review the same chapter twice). i especially love how you cover the same track of time from two completely different mindsets- not just peter and neal, but a whole "order and chaos" mentality. it's amazing, and fluid, and cohesive both separately and as a whole, which is really impressive given the incohesive state you're writing. update soon- i can't wait for the next chapter!
8/24/2011 c3 8govgal
great chapter. I like how you keep filling in blanks. I'm so glad this isn't the end!
8govgalgreat chapter. I like how you keep filling in blanks. I'm so glad this isn't the end!
8/24/2011 c3 1Nekojin7209
great job with this chapter, as well with this story. i love that you don't make the characters OOC. please update as soon as you can!
1Nekojin7209great job with this chapter, as well with this story. i love that you don't make the characters OOC. please update as soon as you can!
8/24/2011 c3 5sleepysadkid
I really don't have any bad things I can say about this :). I love the vocabulary you used and how you approached this story. You did a really great job at showing how much Neal and Peter mean to each other, like father and son. I truly loved this story and can't wait for you to publish more.
5sleepysadkidI really don't have any bad things I can say about this :). I love the vocabulary you used and how you approached this story. You did a really great job at showing how much Neal and Peter mean to each other, like father and son. I truly loved this story and can't wait for you to publish more.
8/24/2011 c3 21Aranna Undomiel
Ahw, I really wanted to give NEal a hug at the end of the chapter. Poor man, having to relive all that again...hopefully Burke will bring him back to his old self again!
21Aranna UndomielAhw, I really wanted to give NEal a hug at the end of the chapter. Poor man, having to relive all that again...hopefully Burke will bring him back to his old self again!
8/24/2011 c3 85Bookjunk
That was a lie too, right? Secretly, you are planning to write ten more chapters, haha. Anyway, I cannot mind if we get more of this story. It's simply delightful. I really loved the waking up scene. It was realistic and very well-written. Also a favourite; how you described the feeling of loss ripping through Neal when he thought Peter had died. Just excellent. Just wonderful. Just... write more!
85BookjunkThat was a lie too, right? Secretly, you are planning to write ten more chapters, haha. Anyway, I cannot mind if we get more of this story. It's simply delightful. I really loved the waking up scene. It was realistic and very well-written. Also a favourite; how you described the feeling of loss ripping through Neal when he thought Peter had died. Just excellent. Just wonderful. Just... write more!
8/24/2011 c3 erkdlfo
YOU CAN'T END IT! YOU CAN'T. I love this story and the protection/friendship between Neal and Peter(: Great story!
YOU CAN'T END IT! YOU CAN'T. I love this story and the protection/friendship between Neal and Peter(: Great story!