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I'm not a huge fan of How to Train Your Dragon but I love reading stories that are great! :)
I'm excited for the new stories you'll possibly make. XD
I'm not a huge fan of How to Train Your Dragon but I love reading stories that are great! :)
I'm excited for the new stories you'll possibly make. XD
9/27/2012 c1 
4Jyn-the-Raccoon
I say go for it, I would totally read this! I mean, it is a little flat but hey, i'm not going to judge what you're happy writing. If it makes you happy, it makes you happy. I also came to say thanks for checking me out! I might even consider resurrecting that story just for you! keep writing!
4Jyn-the-RaccoonI say go for it, I would totally read this! I mean, it is a little flat but hey, i'm not going to judge what you're happy writing. If it makes you happy, it makes you happy. I also came to say thanks for checking me out! I might even consider resurrecting that story just for you! keep writing!
7/25/2011 c2 AccountKiller32458
This was considerably better than the last chapter or the 'preview' trailer. And you did sort of change the storyline into something a bit more interesting when you included the army - I thought it was a bit overdone as some things were exactly the same as the movie i.e- fish eating part and Red Death. But on the whole, a much better script for trailer.
This was considerably better than the last chapter or the 'preview' trailer. And you did sort of change the storyline into something a bit more interesting when you included the army - I thought it was a bit overdone as some things were exactly the same as the movie i.e- fish eating part and Red Death. But on the whole, a much better script for trailer.
7/24/2011 c1 6NightFury994
For me, the story sounds predictable. Your characters, at least from this, aren't acting like real people, and the dialogue sounds boring. Granted, I know this was a "trailer", but if i was reading this from actual story, I would stop halfway through, and move on.
I suggest if you do end up writing it, make the effort to make it different from other stories with similiar concepts.
6NightFury994For me, the story sounds predictable. Your characters, at least from this, aren't acting like real people, and the dialogue sounds boring. Granted, I know this was a "trailer", but if i was reading this from actual story, I would stop halfway through, and move on.
I suggest if you do end up writing it, make the effort to make it different from other stories with similiar concepts.
7/24/2011 c1 AccountKiller32458
You had a rather interesting concept here however your execution of this trailer just doesn't work, it just sounds like a Mary Sue story to me.
If you had started with the two girls photography sessions being interrupted and then skipped on the explanation of... wait, let me try and recreate this.
Two girls in a forest, one is seated reading a book (How to Train your dragon?) while the other is taking photos. Suddenly the sun is blocked out for an instant.
Girl One: What was that?
Both girls stop what their doing and look around, they hear a noise and go to investigate. Girl One is leading while Girl Two holds her arm, hesitating.
They hear the noise again and Girl One leaves Girl Two behind, suddenly Girl Two runs and tackles Girl One to the ground as a large object hurtles towards them. They look up to see a Night Fury (N.F) in front of them.
Then it would probably cut to a montage of the two of them trying to touch the N.F, Flying, Falling from a high altitude, trying to hide it in their rooms (if this is set in the future, if not...) them meeting the REAL Toothless and Hiccup.
But yes, I MAY have gone a bit overboard with this analysis. I'm a film student so I apologize.
IT was an interesting concept though.
: jtoasn
You had a rather interesting concept here however your execution of this trailer just doesn't work, it just sounds like a Mary Sue story to me.
If you had started with the two girls photography sessions being interrupted and then skipped on the explanation of... wait, let me try and recreate this.
Two girls in a forest, one is seated reading a book (How to Train your dragon?) while the other is taking photos. Suddenly the sun is blocked out for an instant.
Girl One: What was that?
Both girls stop what their doing and look around, they hear a noise and go to investigate. Girl One is leading while Girl Two holds her arm, hesitating.
They hear the noise again and Girl One leaves Girl Two behind, suddenly Girl Two runs and tackles Girl One to the ground as a large object hurtles towards them. They look up to see a Night Fury (N.F) in front of them.
Then it would probably cut to a montage of the two of them trying to touch the N.F, Flying, Falling from a high altitude, trying to hide it in their rooms (if this is set in the future, if not...) them meeting the REAL Toothless and Hiccup.
But yes, I MAY have gone a bit overboard with this analysis. I'm a film student so I apologize.
IT was an interesting concept though.
: jtoasn