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11Kikiome
We're all laughing at him lol, the things we do for our little wards. I could see this continued in drabble shots with all kinds of humorous things. Well written.
11KikiomeWe're all laughing at him lol, the things we do for our little wards. I could see this continued in drabble shots with all kinds of humorous things. Well written.
11/21/2013 c1 overninethousand
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5/6/2013 c1 8Doctor Yok
A cute fic! It needs a little bit of aesthetic clean up, but other than that the reveal was artfully done. I'd suggest having someone proofread, because there are a few parts that are a little awkward to read. Also, don't bother putting your dialogue in bold - it makes it a little jarring to read, and it looks just as dramatic in the original font. Especially in a cute little fic like this, bold is a tad too BAM on the eyes. Bold is typically used for overstatement, exaggeration, and seriousness.
However, besides that, this little ficlet is awfully adorable! Everyone is in character (though I question how close Kagome would've really been able to get to Sesshoumaru without him trying to turn her into mincemeat), and the narrative is very entertaining.
It's good to see a small drabble for something humorous. It brightens the day and cheers one's heart. Keep writing!
8Doctor YokA cute fic! It needs a little bit of aesthetic clean up, but other than that the reveal was artfully done. I'd suggest having someone proofread, because there are a few parts that are a little awkward to read. Also, don't bother putting your dialogue in bold - it makes it a little jarring to read, and it looks just as dramatic in the original font. Especially in a cute little fic like this, bold is a tad too BAM on the eyes. Bold is typically used for overstatement, exaggeration, and seriousness.
However, besides that, this little ficlet is awfully adorable! Everyone is in character (though I question how close Kagome would've really been able to get to Sesshoumaru without him trying to turn her into mincemeat), and the narrative is very entertaining.
It's good to see a small drabble for something humorous. It brightens the day and cheers one's heart. Keep writing!
2/4/2013 c1 1OkayestCleric
Bahahaha! I was laughing so hard at this! Even now I've got a huge silly grin on ny face! Loved it!
1OkayestClericBahahaha! I was laughing so hard at this! Even now I've got a huge silly grin on ny face! Loved it!
12/21/2012 c1 Guest
I cracked up
I cracked up
9/16/2012 c1 3goldenwing57
Forget Inu no Taishou laughing; he'd be rolling on the ground and clutching his sides while cracking up! I sure as heck am!
3goldenwing57Forget Inu no Taishou laughing; he'd be rolling on the ground and clutching his sides while cracking up! I sure as heck am!
7/25/2011 c1 2Toreh
Glad you found my last review helpful! It's much easier on the eyes now that you spaced it out! However, all you really need to do is properly form seperate paragraphs, not just double space a huge paragraph. Perhaps each time when a new person speaks? For Example,
"This was all her fault"…He gave a cold glare as he looked over at the one that was the source of all his misery. He wanted to kill her….he really did. And he would…if it would
not upset his ward, which he knew it would if he killed the irritating miko.
Said miko was currently looking at him, a weird smile on her face as she watched Rin playing happily with her adopted father.
Though the daiyoukai wouldn't admit it he saw the girl as a daughter and would fiercely protect her from any threat. It was because of the girl he was suffering the humiliation he was now.
Hearing the stifling of laughter he turned his eyes to glare at said miko who wisely when she saw his murderous look, wisely chose to keep silent…for now.
He had indulged in this foolishness only to make his ward happy and because the things the miko brought from her home kept the child from pestering him as much.
Except…this last time was his undoing.
- Something to that effect. Sometimes you can have a single sentence in it's own line to put emphasis on it. I hope that helps. ^^
2TorehGlad you found my last review helpful! It's much easier on the eyes now that you spaced it out! However, all you really need to do is properly form seperate paragraphs, not just double space a huge paragraph. Perhaps each time when a new person speaks? For Example,
"This was all her fault"…He gave a cold glare as he looked over at the one that was the source of all his misery. He wanted to kill her….he really did. And he would…if it would
not upset his ward, which he knew it would if he killed the irritating miko.
Said miko was currently looking at him, a weird smile on her face as she watched Rin playing happily with her adopted father.
Though the daiyoukai wouldn't admit it he saw the girl as a daughter and would fiercely protect her from any threat. It was because of the girl he was suffering the humiliation he was now.
Hearing the stifling of laughter he turned his eyes to glare at said miko who wisely when she saw his murderous look, wisely chose to keep silent…for now.
He had indulged in this foolishness only to make his ward happy and because the things the miko brought from her home kept the child from pestering him as much.
Except…this last time was his undoing.
- Something to that effect. Sometimes you can have a single sentence in it's own line to put emphasis on it. I hope that helps. ^^
7/25/2011 c1 Taraah36
Lmao Omg! Hahaha poor Sessh... wearing a dress. I'm sure his father I somewhere just deeply chuckling :-)
It just shows how much he cares for Rin :-)
Lmao Omg! Hahaha poor Sessh... wearing a dress. I'm sure his father I somewhere just deeply chuckling :-)
It just shows how much he cares for Rin :-)