for Rosalie's Gift11/11/2013 c2 Travvy
I loved it! It has a great potential to become a fantastic story, the plot line is there and all that and you definitely can make a story about Rosalie and Emmet having the baby and that stuff! It would be amazing :) keep up the great work though!
I loved it! It has a great potential to become a fantastic story, the plot line is there and all that and you definitely can make a story about Rosalie and Emmet having the baby and that stuff! It would be amazing :) keep up the great work though!
9/4/2011 c2 
2Starlit Stranger
Okay so.
I see you molested the enter key. Which I mean, dialogue is good, but you're going to want much more meat in there. Since it's 1st person it should be easy to put Bella's thoughts in there between what people are saying. Just dialogue doesn't read well :C
Because of that it went REALLY quick, like... wow it's over?
And Tyler? Seriously?
xDDDD
-Josephine 3
2Starlit StrangerOkay so.
I see you molested the enter key. Which I mean, dialogue is good, but you're going to want much more meat in there. Since it's 1st person it should be easy to put Bella's thoughts in there between what people are saying. Just dialogue doesn't read well :C
Because of that it went REALLY quick, like... wow it's over?
And Tyler? Seriously?
xDDDD
-Josephine 3
7/27/2011 c2 1ChicksDigDarkLords
It was good. It seems unfinished though. Do you have a beta, because it needs to be cleaned up a bit. I could do that for you. Technically I can't be a Beta on ff, because I only have one story, and it's less rhan 6,000 words, which is the only qualification I haven't met. Think about it, my email is on my profile, or you can message me here.
1ChicksDigDarkLordsIt was good. It seems unfinished though. Do you have a beta, because it needs to be cleaned up a bit. I could do that for you. Technically I can't be a Beta on ff, because I only have one story, and it's less rhan 6,000 words, which is the only qualification I haven't met. Think about it, my email is on my profile, or you can message me here.