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8/12/2011 c1 OMG It's Autumn
HAHAHAHAHAHAHA! THE END JUST HIT ME SO HARD! LOL
8/12/2011 c2 5Goldenstar13
Okay, onto the next chapter.

Stars: Still 4. This time, the story was a tiny bit harder to read, but that's okay.

Strengths: Personality, humor

Weaknesses: It was a bit harder to read, and everything was sort of bunched together.

Errors: See above.

Okay, I'm going to go read the rest now…let's see what we've got.

Goldenstar13, Special Guild Agent 002
8/12/2011 c1 Goldenstar13
I like it! In my opinion it's better and funnier than other facebook warriors.

Stars: 4 (so far). I know I've only read one chapter, but still. Your personality shines, you use good words, and it's funny. Awesome!

Strengths: Personality (voice), word choice, humor

Weaknesses: A bit of a short chapter, but that's it.

Errors: I suggest that when Firestar reads comments, the comment is on the next line. Also, maybe make it like, "Bluestar says blah blah blah'. You don't have to abide to this, as it's just a suggestion.

Okay, I'm going to go read the rest! Stand by for more reviews…

Goldenstar13, Special Guild Agent* 002

*Special Guild is something I made up. It's not a group of critics or anything, don't worry. :)
8/12/2011 c3 2Who lit Toph on Fire
Haha not bad i like it :D
8/12/2011 c3 3Summers Sky
hahaha i thought that was funny i like it when tsset out like that it makes it easier to read i am not tigerstar i loved that and i have an idea that you might be able to use you could put for example

ThIs_ Is _ NoT_ BrOKenStAR and it actuslly is i thought that was wehat you weere doing with brambleclaws one so i thought it was funny but i like it anyway but that might be a good idea cus its so obvious hahaha still like it update soon!
8/12/2011 c2 Summers Sky
heheheh i like it but i want it to be longer so i can get properly into your story and i know how you feel when no omne reviews its like COME ONE PEOPLE ITS NOT HARD TO TYPE A FEW WORDS i still feel like that now sometimes hahaha
8/12/2011 c1 Summers Sky
it looks good illl continue to read it!
8/12/2011 c1 5Pebblepaw10
Yay, I get a plushie, thanks.

I'm not the biggest fan of Firestar but this is good, I like it.

Maybe next time longer, I just love this stuff
8/11/2011 c3 Xcvfsvbqusyoij
XD Lol! That's so funny: I_Am_nOt_tigerstar. Bramble must look too much alike! XD :)
8/11/2011 c3 6Prussian Fangirl 13
LOVE da story :3 its epic X3
8/11/2011 c1 Prussian Fangirl 13
LOVE STORY SO FUNNY
8/11/2011 c2 Prussian Fangirl 13
EPIC STORY SO FUNNY X3
8/7/2011 c2 A graceful haze
you should read feigns face book its awsome. really u should
8/7/2011 c2 5Pebblepaw10
Nice,this is funny.

Maybe a longer one woulld be nice,or super
8/7/2011 c2 Xcvfsvbqusyoij
This is great! I don't personally have a facebook, and my friend's teasing me that even FIRESTAR has a facebook but I don't :/ LOL! Keep it up! :3
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