for My Life With Kate9/17/2011 c3 Dylano146
First off, amusing how Humphrey slept with Lilly. It's too bad, I like Humphrey :p but it's your story so I'll dance. One thing I need to mention is that people don't ask to cry on someone's shoulder, they just do it, and if feelings are in the right place then they wouldn't have to ask. You know what I mean?
The only real thing you need to focus on is the romance and it's a tricky thing. But you just have to make it seem as natural as possible. Maybe have an incident that beings them closer such as danger and you saving Kate. Then kind of work things from there. You can't make things to obvious too quickly, otherwise it seems kinda cheesy. Have the two characters work their way into each others hearts and by that I mean they don't know the other lives them until they both know.
Hope to see more from you soon.
Dylano146
First off, amusing how Humphrey slept with Lilly. It's too bad, I like Humphrey :p but it's your story so I'll dance. One thing I need to mention is that people don't ask to cry on someone's shoulder, they just do it, and if feelings are in the right place then they wouldn't have to ask. You know what I mean?
The only real thing you need to focus on is the romance and it's a tricky thing. But you just have to make it seem as natural as possible. Maybe have an incident that beings them closer such as danger and you saving Kate. Then kind of work things from there. You can't make things to obvious too quickly, otherwise it seems kinda cheesy. Have the two characters work their way into each others hearts and by that I mean they don't know the other lives them until they both know.
Hope to see more from you soon.
Dylano146
9/17/2011 c2 Dylano146
I haven't read one of your new chapters in a while now. I really like were it's going and have high hopes that it will raise to M rating. You know... Cuz I'm weird.
Dylano146
I haven't read one of your new chapters in a while now. I really like were it's going and have high hopes that it will raise to M rating. You know... Cuz I'm weird.
Dylano146
9/16/2011 c3 Super long-dead account
Mmm... Bacon. I find it cool that as I was reading this, I had a large plate of bacon next to me. Oh the epicness.
Anyways, good chapter. Try to put in a bit more descriptive detail though.
Mmm... Bacon. I find it cool that as I was reading this, I had a large plate of bacon next to me. Oh the epicness.
Anyways, good chapter. Try to put in a bit more descriptive detail though.
8/24/2011 c2 Indifference1990
wow i like it but how does this turn into a love romance story if she is a wolf and hes is a human keep writing
wow i like it but how does this turn into a love romance story if she is a wolf and hes is a human keep writing
8/15/2011 c2 
6Mike101
For now I like the story. It would have been nice if Chris had got to see the rest of Kate's pack. Oh well.
6Mike101For now I like the story. It would have been nice if Chris had got to see the rest of Kate's pack. Oh well.
8/14/2011 c2 16AlexTheHeretic
I can just tell that this is going to be the BEST Bestiality story ever! :D
lol.
16AlexTheHereticI can just tell that this is going to be the BEST Bestiality story ever! :D
lol.
8/13/2011 c2 4justnick
ummm a nice story but if you want to go further it needs to be in the m section though
4justnickummm a nice story but if you want to go further it needs to be in the m section though
8/13/2011 c1 Dylano146
See I've always wanted to read something like this. Something that has to do with myself or in this case you. But for each story I read I place myself as the main character. It really makes me feel apart of the story, and let's be honest, Kate is gorgeous. But either way you did pretty well. Again you just need to put spaces between different speakers and stuff like that. Also the cod references I thought were quite funny, because I'm addicted to cod. And of course Alpha and Omega. Look forward to reading more very soon. This seems like a story that could get quite interesting and something I haven't really read before. Keep it up dude.
Dylano146
See I've always wanted to read something like this. Something that has to do with myself or in this case you. But for each story I read I place myself as the main character. It really makes me feel apart of the story, and let's be honest, Kate is gorgeous. But either way you did pretty well. Again you just need to put spaces between different speakers and stuff like that. Also the cod references I thought were quite funny, because I'm addicted to cod. And of course Alpha and Omega. Look forward to reading more very soon. This seems like a story that could get quite interesting and something I haven't really read before. Keep it up dude.
Dylano146
8/13/2011 c1 9Zoids Fanatic
Well... a wolf/human pairing is certainly... intresting? Regardless, lets actually review this story, shall we? First off, you have no disclaimer at all. You need one. Second, learn to place spaces. The entire story was a massive blob of words, with three spaces. It gets almost nearly impossable to read this, as it burns. Also, you should note that you make a space everytime someone new talks.
As for content... aside from the fear it will install in me later on, it was alright. Your main character wasn't a MAJOR Gary-Sue, aside from speaking to animals (by the way, who really goes out in the forest for a walk with a 9 mm hand gun?). Though I'd suggest to try to limit the amount of real world refeinces you make, as well as not saying "No flames".
9Zoids FanaticWell... a wolf/human pairing is certainly... intresting? Regardless, lets actually review this story, shall we? First off, you have no disclaimer at all. You need one. Second, learn to place spaces. The entire story was a massive blob of words, with three spaces. It gets almost nearly impossable to read this, as it burns. Also, you should note that you make a space everytime someone new talks.
As for content... aside from the fear it will install in me later on, it was alright. Your main character wasn't a MAJOR Gary-Sue, aside from speaking to animals (by the way, who really goes out in the forest for a walk with a 9 mm hand gun?). Though I'd suggest to try to limit the amount of real world refeinces you make, as well as not saying "No flames".