
10/5/2021 c6 LB Cat
Thanks for the enjoyable read. Stay safe and happy.
Thanks for the enjoyable read. Stay safe and happy.
9/18/2021 c3 Lord Vaserious
Good, the snake pedo is dead. But what has happened to our favourite ninja?
Good, the snake pedo is dead. But what has happened to our favourite ninja?
9/18/2021 c2 Lord Vaserious
Excellent chapter. Everything was going well until the snake pedo showed up.
Excellent chapter. Everything was going well until the snake pedo showed up.
7/23/2021 c1 Beer is food
Hmmm
dunno about this fic.
I've only read the first chapter so far and i can see that Naruto taking the Tsukuyomi instead of Sasuke might be a nice premise.
The Illusion sequence is a bit over the top.
The 'fight scene', if you may call it that, is just lol wtf?
Also 12 year old Sasuke ain't no sensor and even if you make him one, Kisame has Biju level Chakra reserves, which 12 yo Naruto doesn't. Afaik Kawarimi doesn't work on people anyways.
Btw i can't see Itachi going through with the Jutsu on Naruto, especially when he sees Naruto taking the hit for Sasuke. Keep in mind that, although Itachi might be thinking that torturing his little brother through illusions is a great way to get him stronger (Uchiha Child Raising for Dummies 101), he IS working against Akatsuki -somewhat. I could rather see him 'handing' over Shisuis eye secretly instead like he did in Shippuuden. Itachi is also way too badass to accidentally use the Tsukuyomi on someone he doesn't want to. And i still believe that Kawarimi doesn't work on people.
Over the years i really developed a loathing for "evil civilians" fics. Hinata overhearing someone talk about the 'demon brat' just makes my eye roll too.
Also the reaction of Sasuke is a bit off. At this point it seems he suddenly caught a bit of the illness named 'Gary-Stu-Syndrome'.
Characters turning a 180 isn't uncommon in Stories - especially Anime tho. But it's way too rushed so it seems unbelievable. I mean Sasuke didn't even get a dose of 'Talk-no-Jutsu' at this point of time in the canon story line.
Gai telling Hinata what happened is also kinda... meh
Although Gai has a ...boisterous personality, as a Jounin he knows operational security and anything concerning a high ranked mission i.e. retrieving a Hokage candidate and encountering two S-rank Nuke-nin should be kept secret and not spilled to a 'mere' Genin.
Well, still it might be interesting in later chapters, but then i noticed that you posted 6 chapters in the span of 9 (now almost 10) years.
Even if it might turn out to be a good fic, which im not really thinking it will be so far, the waiting time would just make me hate this story :/
I consider myself a patient person, but that's way too much waiting time, even for me.
Good luck with this fic anyways
Hmmm
dunno about this fic.
I've only read the first chapter so far and i can see that Naruto taking the Tsukuyomi instead of Sasuke might be a nice premise.
The Illusion sequence is a bit over the top.
The 'fight scene', if you may call it that, is just lol wtf?
Also 12 year old Sasuke ain't no sensor and even if you make him one, Kisame has Biju level Chakra reserves, which 12 yo Naruto doesn't. Afaik Kawarimi doesn't work on people anyways.
Btw i can't see Itachi going through with the Jutsu on Naruto, especially when he sees Naruto taking the hit for Sasuke. Keep in mind that, although Itachi might be thinking that torturing his little brother through illusions is a great way to get him stronger (Uchiha Child Raising for Dummies 101), he IS working against Akatsuki -somewhat. I could rather see him 'handing' over Shisuis eye secretly instead like he did in Shippuuden. Itachi is also way too badass to accidentally use the Tsukuyomi on someone he doesn't want to. And i still believe that Kawarimi doesn't work on people.
Over the years i really developed a loathing for "evil civilians" fics. Hinata overhearing someone talk about the 'demon brat' just makes my eye roll too.
Also the reaction of Sasuke is a bit off. At this point it seems he suddenly caught a bit of the illness named 'Gary-Stu-Syndrome'.
Characters turning a 180 isn't uncommon in Stories - especially Anime tho. But it's way too rushed so it seems unbelievable. I mean Sasuke didn't even get a dose of 'Talk-no-Jutsu' at this point of time in the canon story line.
Gai telling Hinata what happened is also kinda... meh
Although Gai has a ...boisterous personality, as a Jounin he knows operational security and anything concerning a high ranked mission i.e. retrieving a Hokage candidate and encountering two S-rank Nuke-nin should be kept secret and not spilled to a 'mere' Genin.
Well, still it might be interesting in later chapters, but then i noticed that you posted 6 chapters in the span of 9 (now almost 10) years.
Even if it might turn out to be a good fic, which im not really thinking it will be so far, the waiting time would just make me hate this story :/
I consider myself a patient person, but that's way too much waiting time, even for me.
Good luck with this fic anyways
3/8/2021 c6 coolchick87
I love ur story please update your story soon I'm looking forward to your story
I love ur story please update your story soon I'm looking forward to your story
12/22/2020 c6 Danny Williams
I like the way this story is going, looks like Sauske is heading in the right direction.
Hinata is going to take care of Naruto which I believe she will enjoy doing.,
Story has action and hopefully romance in the future.
I like the way this story is going, looks like Sauske is heading in the right direction.
Hinata is going to take care of Naruto which I believe she will enjoy doing.,
Story has action and hopefully romance in the future.
12/15/2020 c6
1TheWateringWizard
No I need more ! Can’t wait to read all the shenanigans they’ll get up to

No I need more ! Can’t wait to read all the shenanigans they’ll get up to
12/1/2020 c6 AvatarUzumaki
great chapter! super excited for the future 9f this story! I am looking forward to Naruto and Hinata living together can't wait to read the next update
great chapter! super excited for the future 9f this story! I am looking forward to Naruto and Hinata living together can't wait to read the next update