for Garden Of Eden: Remake11/17/2011 c1 
8Q3APo
this is good. i like this very much. i can't wait for the next chapter. though its confuse me, this is harry fifth year isn't it? shouldn't he already sixteen? i like slowly but worthy chapter.
8Q3APothis is good. i like this very much. i can't wait for the next chapter. though its confuse me, this is harry fifth year isn't it? shouldn't he already sixteen? i like slowly but worthy chapter.
11/16/2011 c1 12Liria Nai
Faster updates shorter chapters please!
I really like this concept btw, and I can't wait to see where you go with it. There arent enough good HP/LV stories out there and most of the potential good ones arent even updated anymore. So please please please continue this?
12Liria NaiFaster updates shorter chapters please!
I really like this concept btw, and I can't wait to see where you go with it. There arent enough good HP/LV stories out there and most of the potential good ones arent even updated anymore. So please please please continue this?
11/16/2011 c1 4Kyrie Lorelei
please don't let Harry tell him who he is.. It be more interesting if Tommy found out in some weird way... I think.
4Kyrie Loreleiplease don't let Harry tell him who he is.. It be more interesting if Tommy found out in some weird way... I think.
11/7/2011 c1 SlightlySociopathic
I really enjoyed reading this. It captures your attention with a few sent.s I was very impressed with the trasition with Harry's POV in the begining, it was vey smooth. I read the original and liked it very much, but this one seems even more interesting. Please update soon!
I really enjoyed reading this. It captures your attention with a few sent.s I was very impressed with the trasition with Harry's POV in the begining, it was vey smooth. I read the original and liked it very much, but this one seems even more interesting. Please update soon!
10/28/2011 c1 shggbh
The remake of this story is even better than the original! I really prefer it this way! It was worth it! ^^
And I personnaly prefer longer chapters, even if it means slower update!
anyway, i hope you'll update soon, this story is brilliant and I can't wait for the next chapter to be up!
Thanks so much for (re) writting this story! :D
The remake of this story is even better than the original! I really prefer it this way! It was worth it! ^^
And I personnaly prefer longer chapters, even if it means slower update!
anyway, i hope you'll update soon, this story is brilliant and I can't wait for the next chapter to be up!
Thanks so much for (re) writting this story! :D
9/16/2011 c1 1Ray-chan01
Hey^^
in my opinion this version is far better than the first one and I already loved the first version 3
I love it^^
You have really written it a whole different and I like it that way, so please hurry up with the next chapter!
Yours, Ray-chan01
1Ray-chan01Hey^^
in my opinion this version is far better than the first one and I already loved the first version 3
I love it^^
You have really written it a whole different and I like it that way, so please hurry up with the next chapter!
Yours, Ray-chan01
8/27/2011 c1 UPDATE PLEASE
This is a good story that I would hate not to read.So hurry?
This is a good story that I would hate not to read.So hurry?
8/22/2011 c1 lily
I'd prefer long chapters and fast updates ;) no, just kidding, i just hope the story goes on as good as the first chapter was :)
I'd prefer long chapters and fast updates ;) no, just kidding, i just hope the story goes on as good as the first chapter was :)
8/20/2011 c1 11diggydawg
hey,
i definitely preferred this remake to the other one. It's good, but if you'd like some constructive criticism, here you go: Your plot and story are good, now as you write try and vary your sentence length. It adds effect and dimension to your writing rather than giving the feel of 'monotone telling it' if you know what I'm saying? Also during the beginning a few times there was a 'her' instead of 'he', although if you wanted it as a general term instead you could put 'they'. I was actually impressed by how the story eased itself into Harry's POV - it was descriptive and it showed the opinion of the voice (narrator, whatever) clearly with the descriptive techniques used.
Well, there you go. Please continue this story! :)I love Tom/Harry. I hope my advice helps you, if you decide to take it, after all.
11diggydawghey,
i definitely preferred this remake to the other one. It's good, but if you'd like some constructive criticism, here you go: Your plot and story are good, now as you write try and vary your sentence length. It adds effect and dimension to your writing rather than giving the feel of 'monotone telling it' if you know what I'm saying? Also during the beginning a few times there was a 'her' instead of 'he', although if you wanted it as a general term instead you could put 'they'. I was actually impressed by how the story eased itself into Harry's POV - it was descriptive and it showed the opinion of the voice (narrator, whatever) clearly with the descriptive techniques used.
Well, there you go. Please continue this story! :)I love Tom/Harry. I hope my advice helps you, if you decide to take it, after all.