for Manga Boyfriend5/11/2013 c3 guest
No offense, but you really need to work on your grammar. The story makes no sense. I can't even understand what's happening in the story.
No offense, but you really need to work on your grammar. The story makes no sense. I can't even understand what's happening in the story.
7/31/2012 c15 oO0RyuuHeartsYou0Oo
omg this is my first time reading this in like forever i love it even more this time kya!
omg this is my first time reading this in like forever i love it even more this time kya!
5/26/2012 c15 san
this was a amazing chapter
i love it :)
this was a amazing chapter
i love it :)
5/18/2012 c14 sandra
your story is so amazing and so sweet... i love it so much *_*
i hope you write more soon, because i want to read how the story goes on :)
your story is so amazing and so sweet... i love it so much *_*
i hope you write more soon, because i want to read how the story goes on :)
4/4/2012 c12 noivocaine
Have you given it to anyone? Just so I can finish this story lol I love it it's a shame you got writers block I have the smae thing sort of lol. Well anyways if you have given your story to somebody else to finiish just pm me so I can read the rest :D
Have you given it to anyone? Just so I can finish this story lol I love it it's a shame you got writers block I have the smae thing sort of lol. Well anyways if you have given your story to somebody else to finiish just pm me so I can read the rest :D
3/19/2012 c2 
8Blackenflames
ooooooooooh i like this story a lot
heheheh
I love Angel's personality
continue writing and I'll keep reviewing (:
8Blackenflamesooooooooooh i like this story a lot
heheheh
I love Angel's personality
continue writing and I'll keep reviewing (:
1/22/2012 c11 13oO0RyuuHeartsYou0Oo
GOD MY FACE HURTS WHEN I SAW THIS I STOOD UP AND DID A HAPPY DANCE
PS dialogue always starts a new paragraph if you did that your stories would look much longer
PPS try to slow down and describe stuff when you write ( clothes looks location EXT.) use LOTS of adjectives it will make your stories longer and more people will read
13oO0RyuuHeartsYou0OoGOD MY FACE HURTS WHEN I SAW THIS I STOOD UP AND DID A HAPPY DANCE
PS dialogue always starts a new paragraph if you did that your stories would look much longer
PPS try to slow down and describe stuff when you write ( clothes looks location EXT.) use LOTS of adjectives it will make your stories longer and more people will read
1/7/2012 c10 oO0RyuuHeartsYou0Oo
i love you so much you just made my day! (::)(:::)(:::)(:::)(:)::):):):(:()(:):():():():(: ok that was my atempt to type cookies really fast but any way UPDAT ESOON
i love you so much you just made my day! (::)(:::)(:::)(:::)(:)::):):):(:()(:):():():():(: ok that was my atempt to type cookies really fast but any way UPDAT ESOON
1/5/2012 c10 4baesharam
ok, so this story has several errors and the story would be better off if they were fixed. Think of it when you are publishing something to ummmm uhh Harper Collins or whatever, they wouldn't except this story. I think you rush your chapters and write like you would on the internet. The only time grammar mistakes like these are acceptable is when you are writing something like L8ter G8ter by Lauren Myrcale, TTYL, and TTFN.
Honestly, if you edited the chapters before posting and -elaborated - more then maybe you could get like 50 reviews in a month :D
4baesharamok, so this story has several errors and the story would be better off if they were fixed. Think of it when you are publishing something to ummmm uhh Harper Collins or whatever, they wouldn't except this story. I think you rush your chapters and write like you would on the internet. The only time grammar mistakes like these are acceptable is when you are writing something like L8ter G8ter by Lauren Myrcale, TTYL, and TTFN.
Honestly, if you edited the chapters before posting and -elaborated - more then maybe you could get like 50 reviews in a month :D