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12/15/2015 c1 19Smiling Seshat
I think the summary should be a little more clear. I feel it's too vague.
5/4/2012 c1 11Laira Evans
Solid. Covered all the points well, but given it's rated T I'd try to be a little more circumspect. You can get the same feeling, the same humor and heat, without using the actual words. Instead of saying erotic dream, give hints, shadows, lips at her neck. A sudden change to more revealing clothing instead of contraceptives suddenly appearing.

Unless you're British, in which case you're probably spot on. Slightly different sense of humor that side of the sea. The proof is in the two versions of the first episode of the Office.

If you read some of the stuff written fifty or a hundred years ago you can see truly extreme versions of this misdirection. A writer describes a girl having a cup of coffee and at the end of it you realize it was practically a sex scene.
9/30/2011 c1 2BloodWar
great job
9/4/2011 c1 Bone Idle
pretty cool, and funny. I DEMAND A SEQUAL! :)
8/22/2011 c1 2Shinku no Yami
That was cute. Loved the part about the handcuffs XD You did an awesome job.
8/21/2011 c1 48JazzGirl123
Well, that was most interesting.
8/21/2011 c1 1BiteMeHobbit
The story itself wasn't bad, but I hate Harmony, so at the very least, please make the characters Harry and Hermione next time.

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