for Moonlight's Luminance11/30/2012 c5 Guest
Plz update I love this story
Plz update I love this story
10/14/2011 c4 
10yuthika vemosa
Hmm...I wonder who will be Mikan's love partner, is it Natsume or Ruka? Not that I mind though, but great plot! I can see your perspective, girl, though I wish you made it longer in this chapter, nyweiz, good luck and update!
10yuthika vemosaHmm...I wonder who will be Mikan's love partner, is it Natsume or Ruka? Not that I mind though, but great plot! I can see your perspective, girl, though I wish you made it longer in this chapter, nyweiz, good luck and update!
10/12/2011 c4 4The Burnt Jewel
The truth?
Way too rushed. The plot was so beautiful, and it should remain so. This chapter is lacking that...childhood in it. Look at the previous chapters and notice how beautifully illustrated the curved and tense story is. It won't do good to rush. Haste makes waste.
Edit. Transform it into something magical, and in accordance to your words, frame them properly. Think this chapter over again.
I strongly suggest this. I don't want this story to be something pale. I want it to be flamboyant, and i can see you achieve that. So take your time...we readers will always be here in front of the laptop/computer, reading your story. It might as well be late..but it should be PERFECT.
Good luck with the next chapters and keep writing :)
I'm sorry if my review hurt your heart. I just want all of the fan fic writers to be awesome in every way, but i guess that's too much to ask...sorry, really :)
4The Burnt JewelThe truth?
Way too rushed. The plot was so beautiful, and it should remain so. This chapter is lacking that...childhood in it. Look at the previous chapters and notice how beautifully illustrated the curved and tense story is. It won't do good to rush. Haste makes waste.
Edit. Transform it into something magical, and in accordance to your words, frame them properly. Think this chapter over again.
I strongly suggest this. I don't want this story to be something pale. I want it to be flamboyant, and i can see you achieve that. So take your time...we readers will always be here in front of the laptop/computer, reading your story. It might as well be late..but it should be PERFECT.
Good luck with the next chapters and keep writing :)
I'm sorry if my review hurt your heart. I just want all of the fan fic writers to be awesome in every way, but i guess that's too much to ask...sorry, really :)
10/8/2011 c3 Belle Pronounced Bell
Please write some more soon as I am thoroughly enjoying this story :)
Please write some more soon as I am thoroughly enjoying this story :)
9/24/2011 c3 The Burnt Jewel
This is quite am innocent and beautiful story...very intriguing and heart warming :)
Continue on with the story..it would be a shame if you would leave this forgotten..Im sure that the readers would want to explore the lives of the four friends once they got older... :)
Good luck with the next summaries and keep writing, dear :) Your exceptionally good at it.
This is quite am innocent and beautiful story...very intriguing and heart warming :)
Continue on with the story..it would be a shame if you would leave this forgotten..Im sure that the readers would want to explore the lives of the four friends once they got older... :)
Good luck with the next summaries and keep writing, dear :) Your exceptionally good at it.
8/24/2011 c3 4RainyDae
Lol... XD Bunny-boy...
Alice of Contract seems like a interesting Alice~!
Well I love tehe story so far, thank you for posting!
-Crystal
4RainyDaeLol... XD Bunny-boy...
Alice of Contract seems like a interesting Alice~!
Well I love tehe story so far, thank you for posting!
-Crystal
8/23/2011 c2 2yunamoogle
I like this one better although the last one was good too~ keep up the good work! ^^
2yunamoogleI like this one better although the last one was good too~ keep up the good work! ^^
8/23/2011 c2 5Crimson-Midnight-Moon
I still want to read this story :) and hotaru was qite a little mean there, but realy what do I expect? she is after all hotaru :)
5Crimson-Midnight-MoonI still want to read this story :) and hotaru was qite a little mean there, but realy what do I expect? she is after all hotaru :)