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9/24/2011 c4 BigFriendlyGun9000
I'm surprised Corey didn't get mauled by Abby or Owen. Seriously, I expected for one of them to throw him across the room.
9/24/2011 c5 VivianVolkoff
I didn't spot the crossover, and if V4MP is correct, I haven't watched the movie.

Corey's scene with his dad was pretty funny. I like how Abby defended Owen, lol. Corey probably had to change his underwear. And her reassuring Owen was also a nice scene.

Gardner sure got his just desserts. Good way to show Owen how wild the infection in him can be and that he needs more time to learn to control it.

Looks like Shangri-La is done for. I'm thinking there's gonna be a lot of action in the next chapter once you're done with it. And I'm guessing the armored bus comes into play. Hopefully they can get the Doc's research out safely.
9/24/2011 c5 NoOneYouDontKnow
I don't remember him being ancient, but I'm gonna guess that he's the villain from 'Priest', arriving in a train filled with vampires and all.

Corey got set straight it seems, though it won't matter now I suppose. Same for the wife beater.

Take as much time as you need, better a late gem than a quick coal.
9/24/2011 c5 DavidZahir
Again, a good chapter! How did Owen enter the condo without permission?

I'm presuming this new Vampire is Abby's uncle. But I hope not. We've seen that plot twist again and again.

Personally, I find myself wishing the chapter were longer, that you'd described how the adult male vampire destroyed the gate-what sounds it made, how people reacted to see steel bend so easily, etc.

I'm hoping Abby and Owen can save someone.

Well done! I will (mostly) patiently wait for a new chapter. Hell, look how long I've waited for new books by George R.R. Martin!
9/23/2011 c4 VivianVolkoff
Oh gosh, pretty kinky stuff Abby and Owen were up to in the closet, lol. I liked the way you wrote it, though. Humorous yet with a touch of sweetness.

Owen is right to be afraid of needles! They are eevvviilll!

Ahem. The armored bus sounds cool, can't wait to see what they do with that. A horde of roadkill Ferals sounds in order.

Orphans of the Apocalypse sounds so cool, lol. That Corey guy sounds like someone I know O_O and even though what he did was pretty rude, somehow I get the feeling that he's a good kid at heart. Of course I do tend to be wrong about these things. If so, I hope Owen is strong enough to hold himself off from going -too- nuts on Corey. A good old fashion uppercut would do ;)
9/23/2011 c3 VivianVolkoff
Those cultists are pretty brutal. Good source of food for the couple, though.

I always liked the idea of Abby being able to dig a hole for herself to hide in. Even better now that she has someone to share it with!

The Feral guts costume definitely sounded icky, glad it worked! I sense the beginning of a new era coming on thanks to Abby and Owen!
9/23/2011 c2 VivianVolkoff
Cute chapter~ Nothing wrong when two love birds start to get 'touchy' with one another ;)

I'm glad Owen is adjusting so quickly to his new life. Learning to feed on humans is hard, but having Abby there with him, anything is tolerable!
9/23/2011 c1 VivianVolkoff
I must admit your warning scared me away from this story, lol. I liked it, though. Must have been so hard for Abby to go on, but it seems her efforts were rewarded! Looking forward to reading more.
9/23/2011 c4 ryan1078
Wow. Another great chapter.

Pretty cool you're forming like a whole mythology and stuff. Love it.

I really appreciate that with the sex you didn't dive into "OWEN RAMMED HIS THUNDERING PYTHON OF LOVE INTO ABBY'S QUIVERING BODY." cuz that would have sucked. Actually pretty realistic how kids would react.

Huh, Owen did pretty well for his first try. I give my man credit. He is a better man then I, hehe.

Cool with all the other kids in the compound thing. Reminds me of that game Fallout 3.

(Secretly praying Corey gets murdered in the worst way possible.)

Keep up the great work.
9/23/2011 c4 NoOneYouDontKnow
Another good chapter.

The scene you noted was not graphic so I see no problem with it. They're young and don't have the luxury of aging so exploration is inevitable. As long as it doesn't turn into a porno right? XD

Glad things are fairing well in terms of the Doctor's acceptance of Abby and Owen. I hope the rest of the citizens will be able to cope as well if they ever learn the truth. Though some conflict will be unavoidable due to the state of the world.

Looking forward to seeing what transpires between them and the locals. Corey is lucky they are under cover!
9/23/2011 c4 32TorontoBatFan
Awesome chapter.

The scenes with the doctor were good. However, I thought the Owen/Abby scenes were wonderful.

Once again, I didn't find anything offensive with their sex scene. In fact, I found it very sweet. For all that Abby has been seen -and been forced to do- they're still essentially a couple of kids who're really discovering intimacy for the first time. (For Owen it's the first encounter ever. For Abby, it's the first time she's ever been able to enjoy it.) It's so realistic that they're not exactly sure what to do (BTW, I agree that "the old college try" just doesn't sound right for Owen.) and are learning as they go. It's a shame they don't have the internet to give them tips. LOL It was also very sweet how Owen wanted to make her happy. He's clearly getting over his hang-ups.

The scene actually reminded me a bit of the Kevin/Vicki scene from the first "American Pie" film. LOL

BTW, will Abby ever get used to the idea of using a bed? Maybe one day she and Owen actually fall asleep there, rather than moving to the closet. That evening, when they wake up, Abby realizes how comfortable it was and decides to just hang drapes around it.

Nick the Repairman is now the mayor? Is he like Joe the Plumber? LOL For some reason, when I read his lines, all I could imagine was the voice of Mayor Quimby from "The Simpsons". :-D

The scenes with other kids was interesting. I'll bet it's been an age since Abby has encountered other kids, other than Owen.

And that kid Corey...It's realistic that he'd be attracted to Abby. I think he'd better watch out though. He tires making a pass at her one more time, then the ferals might be the least of his worries. Owen, for example, might just tie him into a bowknot. LOL I think Abby isn't aware Owen is jealous. She's not used to normal kids checking her out. For years she thought of herself as nothing, and likely didn't see herself as attractive. Meanwhile, Owen might be insecure about how he looks in comparison to Corey. I think Abby should reassure Owen that he's the only person she could ever want. (Maybe she could kiss him full-on in front of Corey and all the other kids, to let them know that she and Owen are exclusive.) Or, maybe a few girls could be giving Owen the eye...and making Abby a little jealous herself. LOL

I wonder what will happen when everyone else learns just what they are. Once the shock wears off -and, of course, they realize that Abby and Owen aren't a danger to them (so long as Corey leaves Abby alone and girls don't lay their hands on Owen), they'll be fascinated to meet real vampires who aren't the mindless predators they've come to know.

Awesome chapter once again. I can't want for the next one.
9/23/2011 c4 DavidZahir
Quite like the idea of the survivors actually retaining their humanity more than most such post-Apocalyptic tales would have us believe.

Did not object to the sex scene at all ('twas both funny and touching). The content made perfect sense, although I'd prefer more 'beats' breaking up such a powerful scene. And I dislike "the old college try" because I can't quite see Owen using that phrase.

The other kids at the colony-what a very cool idea! But again, they sound kinda grown up. Not in terms of maturity. That makes loads of sense. Something about their style of speech.

Wish the chapter were longer. Please take that as a compliment! Am very much enjoying your tale.
9/17/2011 c3 TorontoBatFan
Another awesome chapter.

Very clever of Owen to think that Abby's blood could be used as the foundation to sythesize a cure and/or a vaccination.

Essentially, Abby could end up helping to save the entire human race. I think she might consider that sufficient amends for her past actions.

I laughed at her having marked the spot as "Where the Crazy People Live". LOL

The cultists seem to be truly evil and scary. I hope Owen and Abby dine out there more often.

The scene where they burrowed themselves into the earth was interesting. I loved how Owen didn't like it until Abby curled up to him. Very realistic.

Heh-heh. I can guess that shower at Shangri-La felt REALLY good after being covered in feral guts...Not to mention having buried themselves udnerground.

I wonder if the doctor will come up with the idea of getting blood donors to provide them with food, yet not having anyone be harmed.

Grat chapter, I can't wait for the next one.
9/16/2011 c3 DavidZahir
Cool! Your plots are logical, your writing quite nice and you've pretty much captured Abby and Owen's voices. My own real complaint is that I wish you'd write more-more about what it is like living around the Ferals, about hunting in this wasteland, about how Owen adjusts to being a vampire in this bizarre new world, about what Shangri-la is like as a community. Please give us more!

What better compliment for a writer, eh?
9/16/2011 c3 NoOneYouDontKnow
Cool chapter. I like how Abby has made a map of all notable places she's encountered.

I think Abby could help quell the doctor's fears by telling him that they didn't need to kill humans and could drink donated blood if it was freshly acquired.
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