
3/6/2014 c30 Vault 712
Great story. Your writing definitely improved by the end of the story. Less of the really long, rambly sentences.
I loved the family magic idea and I thought that the stonehenge thing was going to bring back family magic to GB. I would have loved a little more focus on this. You sort of hinted that the Lupus (maybe ancestors of the Lupins) had family magic. You also hinted that something deep made wizards in GB abandon family magic. I wonder what that was. And also the rift between Malfoys and Weasleys, could that be tied to their family magics?
Great story. Your writing definitely improved by the end of the story. Less of the really long, rambly sentences.
I loved the family magic idea and I thought that the stonehenge thing was going to bring back family magic to GB. I would have loved a little more focus on this. You sort of hinted that the Lupus (maybe ancestors of the Lupins) had family magic. You also hinted that something deep made wizards in GB abandon family magic. I wonder what that was. And also the rift between Malfoys and Weasleys, could that be tied to their family magics?
6/4/2013 c1
397Fire The Canon
This is my response review to your review on Coming Into Winter ch. 55.
Oh, wow, I absolutely adored how you slipped this nicely into canon. It's one of my favourite aspects of fanfiction how people can do that, and this was lovely.
I'm curious now. What will happen? You have set the beginning of this story up very nicely and have left many questions to be answered, which is good.
The only thing I did notice was in England it should be Mummy not Mommy, but other than that, great job!

This is my response review to your review on Coming Into Winter ch. 55.
Oh, wow, I absolutely adored how you slipped this nicely into canon. It's one of my favourite aspects of fanfiction how people can do that, and this was lovely.
I'm curious now. What will happen? You have set the beginning of this story up very nicely and have left many questions to be answered, which is good.
The only thing I did notice was in England it should be Mummy not Mommy, but other than that, great job!
7/30/2012 c30 Ello writer
Another great chapter! This one is very bittersweet and happy ending. I can't wait to see what else you come up with! :)
Another great chapter! This one is very bittersweet and happy ending. I can't wait to see what else you come up with! :)
7/29/2012 c30 guesswho
D'awwwww, what a happy ending; a great last two chapters! Everything was resolved and tied up with a nice neat bow! I knew Charlie and Artemis were gonna get together... heehee! xD Overprotective! Remus was a very realistic methinks! I can't believe it's over; it was truly a wonderful story! I enjoyed reading it very much!
D'awwwww, what a happy ending; a great last two chapters! Everything was resolved and tied up with a nice neat bow! I knew Charlie and Artemis were gonna get together... heehee! xD Overprotective! Remus was a very realistic methinks! I can't believe it's over; it was truly a wonderful story! I enjoyed reading it very much!
6/27/2012 c29 Guest
Oh no! What happened? Whee is tonics? There is no way she would disappear from the store! I hope she is ok
Oh no! What happened? Whee is tonics? There is no way she would disappear from the store! I hope she is ok
5/24/2012 c28 guessssswhooooo
Squeeeeeeee! New chapter! I like how you are progressing the character relationships between the twins and their family; it's not rushed and very understandable. Are Tonks and Remus here to stay or is Artemis' spell not permanent? I can't help to worrry! xD And Greyback is on the run again... uh ohhhhh! Can't wait to see what happens next! xDD
Squeeeeeeee! New chapter! I like how you are progressing the character relationships between the twins and their family; it's not rushed and very understandable. Are Tonks and Remus here to stay or is Artemis' spell not permanent? I can't help to worrry! xD And Greyback is on the run again... uh ohhhhh! Can't wait to see what happens next! xDD
5/20/2012 c28 Sly slytherin princess
Awee! I wonder if Greyback will come back into the picture, and try to go after Lupin now. :D Another good chapter. I wonder how twins and Lupin and Tonks will get closer after so many years.
Awee! I wonder if Greyback will come back into the picture, and try to go after Lupin now. :D Another good chapter. I wonder how twins and Lupin and Tonks will get closer after so many years.
4/29/2012 c27 K8t
Another good chapter! Can't wait to read the next installment.
Another good chapter! Can't wait to read the next installment.
4/26/2012 c27 guesssss
Super cool chapter! I really really really really really really want Artemis and Teddy to talk to their parents! Soon, pretty pretty pretty pleeeeeeeeeease? And Teddy has to talk to Artemis soon, huh huh? Can't wait for the next chapter! ^-^
Super cool chapter! I really really really really really really want Artemis and Teddy to talk to their parents! Soon, pretty pretty pretty pleeeeeeeeeease? And Teddy has to talk to Artemis soon, huh huh? Can't wait for the next chapter! ^-^
4/21/2012 c26
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Awesome story so far, i've really been enjoying this. Are you a professional author, because if i was you i'd consider actually writing a book. you have a lot of talent and could put it to really good use.

Awesome story so far, i've really been enjoying this. Are you a professional author, because if i was you i'd consider actually writing a book. you have a lot of talent and could put it to really good use.
4/21/2012 c24 HeRmIoNe666rIdDlE
"There they are, running late as usual." Said Andromeda
I love these quips! They're bloody hilarious!
"There they are, running late as usual." Said Andromeda
I love these quips! They're bloody hilarious!
4/21/2012 c23 HeRmIoNe666rIdDlE
"You want me to prank him." Teddy said with a smirk
"Pretty much."
"Anything off limits?"
"Nope, prank him till your hearts content."
love it, love it, love it
"You want me to prank him." Teddy said with a smirk
"Pretty much."
"Anything off limits?"
"Nope, prank him till your hearts content."
love it, love it, love it
4/21/2012 c22 HeRmIoNe666rIdDlE
"Okay, why are you two both covered in flour?" asked Artemis
"Well we had a slight incident with the flour bag; we haven't gotten around to cleaning up yet." Explained Andromeda
-hahahahahahahaha
"Okay, why are you two both covered in flour?" asked Artemis
"Well we had a slight incident with the flour bag; we haven't gotten around to cleaning up yet." Explained Andromeda
-hahahahahahahaha