for Mr Nushi12/16/2017 c1 dv36muskan
Don't leave it be at a one-shot. You could develop it a lot more and make it a even better if you continued. Please do!
Don't leave it be at a one-shot. You could develop it a lot more and make it a even better if you continued. Please do!
1/19/2013 c1 lovestruck
You should update this. It would make a great story.
You should update this. It would make a great story.
11/6/2012 c1 Guest
Cute, bit rushed but I thought it was cute.
Cute, bit rushed but I thought it was cute.
10/27/2011 c1 Guest
Good jod so far eternalhappiness-chan. but I have a suggestion that you should do another chapter. Oh and please forgive my formalness
Good jod so far eternalhappiness-chan. but I have a suggestion that you should do another chapter. Oh and please forgive my formalness
99/9/2011 c1 anonymous
i just want to point out that lynn is completely impossible to be a japanese name. there is no l in japanese. or a lone y. her name is rin
i just want to point out that lynn is completely impossible to be a japanese name. there is no l in japanese. or a lone y. her name is rin