for Alchemy of the Heart4/19/2012 c3 
5The Suburban Coyote
Uhhh... You are an awesome writer... but what is going on? it was like a flashback of a vision of a person in a memory in a photo of a person having a premonition in a time capsule in the future of the present in the past... I love the character and the plot, but I have no clue what the timeline is... good job, though, with everything else...
5The Suburban CoyoteUhhh... You are an awesome writer... but what is going on? it was like a flashback of a vision of a person in a memory in a photo of a person having a premonition in a time capsule in the future of the present in the past... I love the character and the plot, but I have no clue what the timeline is... good job, though, with everything else...
10/18/2011 c1 4Ria442
You should update this when you have the time. Even though there's not much yet, i'm already captivated by it and thrilled with couriousity to know how Lynne ended up like that.
4Ria442You should update this when you have the time. Even though there's not much yet, i'm already captivated by it and thrilled with couriousity to know how Lynne ended up like that.
10/4/2011 c1 1AlchemyFreak0218
not too bad considering i don't really like oc stories. The fact that I have some is because my friend doesn't have an account. but still not bad at all...the part where she met Al and Ed was a tad confusing. idk if it was me misinterpreting it as Riza going to find them or if it was an actual mistake. anyhoo I give you a 7 out of 10 :) keep at it! :D
1AlchemyFreak0218not too bad considering i don't really like oc stories. The fact that I have some is because my friend doesn't have an account. but still not bad at all...the part where she met Al and Ed was a tad confusing. idk if it was me misinterpreting it as Riza going to find them or if it was an actual mistake. anyhoo I give you a 7 out of 10 :) keep at it! :D