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4/6/2020 c4 Starlord Master
Jake seems proud.
4/6/2020 c3 Starlord Master
Oh yeah.
4/6/2020 c2 Starlord Master
4/6/2020 c1 Starlord Master
Nice beginning.
6/15/2018 c3 Powerpuff
Now that American Dragon and Invisiogirl meets I wonder what they gonna do about it, and we love to see how Jake meets her parents and her younger brother. oh! you might need to work on your spelling
3/17/2018 c4 191Luiz4200
And another superhero coincidence takes place. I can picture Lao Shi yelling at Jake for telling a Super (is "superhero" really trademarked?) about the magical world.
3/17/2018 c1 Luiz4200
Rotwood has watched too much twilight.
5/3/2016 c4 SkullCrusher550
Hey, nice fanfic you got here! Ignore the first guest reviewer, because he makes you frustrated and never write again. You continue this one. :) and I thank you for reviewing my fanfic.
12/6/2015 c1 Guest
This is a load of FUCKING shit, you are one ignorant retarded moron. Spelling awful, story awful. Don't bother to write any more
5/8/2013 c4 4TheLightningrodAuthor
Good meetings for both Jake and Violet! I grew up with The Incredibles, and I recently started watching ADJL. Keep up the good work!
1/13/2013 c4 spider-pony32
keep up the good work.
4/12/2012 c1 tuxer
looks like this story is going to be interesting.
10/26/2011 c2 8Satrinity
O.O Whoa... um, something needs to be said here. Before you say, "Oh, a flame D:", THIS IS NOT A FLAME. It's my attempt at giving some constructive criticism.

First: Spacing. You may want to work on the spacing here. See that big, long paragraph in there? Go into the story editor and use that enter key to space it out a bit. Don't be afraid to change this into a story that's a little longer. Most people like that!

Second: Spell check wouldn't hurt here, or at least a good old fashioned dictionary. You've got a few tiny errors in spelling and grammar scattered around, as well as a few strangely worded sentences. While it's not too difficult to do yourself, you could look into a beta if it doesn't appeal to you.

Finally: You seem to be repeating yourself quite a bit. Say some of these things aloud before you continue. A few parts are... well, confusing, to say the least. A little more description couldn't hurt, either.

Sorry about all that, but I just don't want to see a story with so much promise go unread by other authors just because they don't give it a chance.

I like how this is shaping up. Happy writing!

10/18/2011 c2 2captaincuddlesthegreat
Really like this story! Everyones in character, and that's great! BTW, love that twilight reference! Laughed by butt off! Keep up the good work!

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