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3/15/2012 c2 26Lady Demoonica Darkmoon
Well I have a suggestion, and you'll likely get it from several readers, if they bother. Each time a different person speaks, even if you end up putting only one or two words, start a new line. Large blocks of text can be hard to read, and it really helps people know when the speaker is changing during a conversation.

I'm loving the interaction between Ranko and Kurama. And poor Shampoo, think she will declare that she will come after Ranko for her loss? Could happen! And she got a Hiei! And a Tan staged Youko!

"Happy?"

"Very."

And so am I! Another fun read.

Ja-ne!

- - - Lady Demoonica Darkmoon
3/15/2012 c1 Lady Demoonica Darkmoon
Added you to the BishiWorld C2. Sorry I hadn't noticed the story sooner. I get a clear picture from your writing, it's good.

Looking forward to seeing who Ranko catches, though I have a few clues. :D

Ja-ne!

- - - Lady Demoonica Darkmoon
3/15/2012 c1 7TarnItUp
This sounds like a fun story! I'll admit, I got really happy when I saw Ryou in this story, even if it was a passing mention :3 lol, anyway, very nice!

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