for The Show Goes On12/7/2011 c2 Dinosaurrluverr
hehe they were all gunna jizz in there pants :D
I like this story so far lol x)
hehe they were all gunna jizz in there pants :D
I like this story so far lol x)
11/13/2011 c4 AnimeLuver515
Oh god! Who is this new person? Sakura? Ino? I need to know now!
By the way: NARUHINA FOREVER PLEASE!
Oh god! Who is this new person? Sakura? Ino? I need to know now!
By the way: NARUHINA FOREVER PLEASE!
10/17/2011 c3 
5Mikicchiii
DEI-CHAMA! SQUEALLLLLL!
*Glomps Deidara*
:3
You might want to check your spelling on some parts. Take your time in checking all your grammar and spelling mistakes. no one's gonna get mad at your for not updating every single day. (they will get mad at you though, if you don't update for a year)
5MikicchiiiDEI-CHAMA! SQUEALLLLLL!
*Glomps Deidara*
:3
You might want to check your spelling on some parts. Take your time in checking all your grammar and spelling mistakes. no one's gonna get mad at your for not updating every single day. (they will get mad at you though, if you don't update for a year)
10/15/2011 c3 10SasuHina4evr
Omg! i wanna a sasuhina story! -.-' yay! akatsuki~ i love them! fantastic fic! i wanna read the next chappie! Ja ne! take care! kisses!
-SasuHina4evr-
↑my siignn~↑ •_\/→deidara or you wanna ^/_\^ →an itachi.
10SasuHina4evrOmg! i wanna a sasuhina story! -.-' yay! akatsuki~ i love them! fantastic fic! i wanna read the next chappie! Ja ne! take care! kisses!
-SasuHina4evr-
↑my siignn~↑ •_\/→deidara or you wanna ^/_\^ →an itachi.
10/15/2011 c3 clementines hat
OMG. OMG. "Big gaping hole you call a 'vagina'"
I DIED at that line. XDDDD
CONTINUE!
I hope you got more reviewers after my last update. o
Please update. :3
~NerdyGamer
OMG. OMG. "Big gaping hole you call a 'vagina'"
I DIED at that line. XDDDD
CONTINUE!
I hope you got more reviewers after my last update. o
Please update. :3
~NerdyGamer
10/15/2011 c3 clementines hat
OMG. OMG. "Big gaping hole you call a 'vagina'"
I DIED at that line. XDDDD
CONTINUE!
I hope you got more reviewers after my last update. o
Please update. :3
~NerdyGamer
OMG. OMG. "Big gaping hole you call a 'vagina'"
I DIED at that line. XDDDD
CONTINUE!
I hope you got more reviewers after my last update. o
Please update. :3
~NerdyGamer
10/15/2011 c2 5Mikicchiii
Yay! an OOC Hina-chan!
Canz Shika plz andz upz withz Tema? :3
Great story! but, you might want to make the dialogue separate from the other stuff. Like:
The limo pulled into the drive way of the Hyuga complex. Everyone piled of the car, none as anxious as Hanabi, since she doesn't really remember Konoha that well. "WOW, this place is so …green!"Exclaimed a 14 year old Hanabi. 'Green' thought Hinata 'reminds me of Rock Lee… I wonder how everyone is…' "Ok, let's unpack" said Hiashi as he walked into the house…slowly… for effect. They all sweat dropped. They went to help him out, so Hiashi wouldn't go into old man fury mode.
you should make it:
The limo pulled into the drive way of the Hyuga complex. Everyone piled of the car, none as anxious as Hanabi, since she doesn't really remember Konoha that well.
"WOW, this place is so …green!"Exclaimed a 14 year old Hanabi.
'Green' thought Hinata 'reminds me of Rock Lee… I wonder how everyone is…'
"Ok, let's unpack" said Hiashi as he walked into the house…slowly… for effect. They all sweat dropped. They went to help him out, so Hiashi wouldn't go into old man fury mode.
like that.
:)
5MikicchiiiYay! an OOC Hina-chan!
Canz Shika plz andz upz withz Tema? :3
Great story! but, you might want to make the dialogue separate from the other stuff. Like:
The limo pulled into the drive way of the Hyuga complex. Everyone piled of the car, none as anxious as Hanabi, since she doesn't really remember Konoha that well. "WOW, this place is so …green!"Exclaimed a 14 year old Hanabi. 'Green' thought Hinata 'reminds me of Rock Lee… I wonder how everyone is…' "Ok, let's unpack" said Hiashi as he walked into the house…slowly… for effect. They all sweat dropped. They went to help him out, so Hiashi wouldn't go into old man fury mode.
you should make it:
The limo pulled into the drive way of the Hyuga complex. Everyone piled of the car, none as anxious as Hanabi, since she doesn't really remember Konoha that well.
"WOW, this place is so …green!"Exclaimed a 14 year old Hanabi.
'Green' thought Hinata 'reminds me of Rock Lee… I wonder how everyone is…'
"Ok, let's unpack" said Hiashi as he walked into the house…slowly… for effect. They all sweat dropped. They went to help him out, so Hiashi wouldn't go into old man fury mode.
like that.
:)
10/15/2011 c3 LoveOverHate
Raaaaaaahh. -Spaz dance- deidaras heeerrreeee! Can't wait for more! I'm really enjoying it :D
Raaaaaaahh. -Spaz dance- deidaras heeerrreeee! Can't wait for more! I'm really enjoying it :D
10/11/2011 c2 anon chan
Gaara of the Funk!
I vote for neither Temari or Ino but for ShikaHina:)
Gaara of the Funk!
I vote for neither Temari or Ino but for ShikaHina:)
10/11/2011 c2 clementines hat
Bwahahahahha. Your so fackin' funny! :3 Man, I wish I had
friends who are funny AND like Anime. TT^TT
Continue! And if you don't mind, I will be telling my subscribers
to review your AWESOME story. Okaiii?
MOAR CHAPPIES!
~NerdyGamer
Bwahahahahha. Your so fackin' funny! :3 Man, I wish I had
friends who are funny AND like Anime. TT^TT
Continue! And if you don't mind, I will be telling my subscribers
to review your AWESOME story. Okaiii?
MOAR CHAPPIES!
~NerdyGamer
10/11/2011 c2 7crimsonkira
LOLOL You're so funny! XD I swear Hinata is so OOC and random. I love it! My favourite - *cue music* GAARA OF THE FUNK! 8D I'm so glad someone other than me knows it! XD But really. You're so random lol. Just like me!
7crimsonkiraLOLOL You're so funny! XD I swear Hinata is so OOC and random. I love it! My favourite - *cue music* GAARA OF THE FUNK! 8D I'm so glad someone other than me knows it! XD But really. You're so random lol. Just like me!
10/10/2011 c1 clementines hat
YOSH! Why does this fanfic have no reviews? It is fantastic!
And NerdyGamer approved! MOAR PWEASE!
~NerdyGamer
YOSH! Why does this fanfic have no reviews? It is fantastic!
And NerdyGamer approved! MOAR PWEASE!
~NerdyGamer