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6/1/2014 c1 Yoru no Katana
Fourth line: It should be "heart" not "hear".
3/9/2013 c1 SofiaChanson
I loved this poem!
6/6/2010 c1 1silpherwoulf
This is so...beautiful. I love how you make Senritsu 'hears' more than what she can see. Kurapika does hide a lot of thing behind his smile *sigh*.

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Thank you for sharing =D

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4/2/2010 c1 13DW-chan
I just like to say kudos for being one of the first HxH fanfic writers out there who did a piece on Senritsu and Kurapica, even not as a couple. ^^ I'm partial to their pairing so... call me a tad biased. :P

Anyway, I just spotted some typographical errors in lines 7 and 8:

"Thoughts, feelings, in your hear reside

Remords, joy, crashingly collide"

You'd want to check your spelling of "heart" and "remorse." :)

Also, in the balcony scene, Kurapica had his dark contact lenses on, so the line "your eyes so blue" seems out of place, even if Senritsu knew Kurapica's true eye color when she first encountered him in the train ride.

Otherwise, this is a lovely poem with a bit of a sad but wistful ending. :) Nice work!
9/26/2009 c1 5teacupz
the emotions blend perfectly with the poem... ah, it have been a bit long since I read a great ANGSTY poems like this...

keep writting!
1/27/2009 c1 13noiha
yaay~~ *add to fave
10/20/2008 c1 krischie
ey, i'm just curious if you are my friend named Michelle magnaye.
8/23/2008 c1 18Feralious
Wow, very nice.
8/2/2007 c1 3colouredwing
It's great! Since the begining I was really interested in this relationship and this poem catches Senritsu personality amazingly good!

She is a very talented observer when it comes to the feelings of people but still she never goes as far as to say that she could determine how someone's heart beats when it's truly itself.

I also love this poem because it doesn't seem as forced due to some ridicioulos ryhme pattern, though it does ryhme on many parts which are nice as well. ^.^

Anyway I will put this into my favourite list.

Thanks for sharing! :D
8/1/2007 c1 1Eige-chan
Aww... that was just so cute, and sad, but it was very very good
4/9/2006 c1 45Hana Rui
beautiful. Just exactly what senritsu may have been thinking in that particular scene.
3/13/2004 c1 15girlwhosings
This poem... is REALLY talking about Kurapica...
Real cool, man.
9/18/2003 c1 7Masami
Wow... This must be one of the best HxH poems I've read! ^_^ Great stuff! ^_^
11/11/2002 c1 4sLL
Eheheh... nice one...

Interesting idea... I never DID think of Senritsu musing about Kurapika ^.^
6/2/2002 c1 4Yami Blue
Awwwwwwww! That was so nice!
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