for Training isn't everything9/25/2018 c1 Noodles
Hmm.. it's bit short but I find myself on not being a fan on the pairing. It's ehhh for me. Sorry but good luck on your writing.
Hmm.. it's bit short but I find myself on not being a fan on the pairing. It's ehhh for me. Sorry but good luck on your writing.
10/24/2012 c1 negilover
i love that story their my fav
i love that story their my fav
1/22/2012 c1 thisaccoutnisdeletednow
Yeah. Like in the other review, grammar (I know it isn't your first language). Length: It's too short. It moved very quickly, there could be some more emotion between the two. Three: realism. I know that it isn't real, but maybe the mature content could have happened after some more dialogue or some sort of connection. But overall, nice job. :)
Yeah. Like in the other review, grammar (I know it isn't your first language). Length: It's too short. It moved very quickly, there could be some more emotion between the two. Three: realism. I know that it isn't real, but maybe the mature content could have happened after some more dialogue or some sort of connection. But overall, nice job. :)
10/25/2011 c1 Anonymous
You're gonna want to bump up the rating on this to M...
Just sayin'
You're gonna want to bump up the rating on this to M...
Just sayin'