for My daughter DAUGHTERS10/13/2013 c10 bdhdjj
Your fic stinks. your grammar is terrible.
Your fic stinks. your grammar is terrible.
7/1/2012 c21 Guest
Hi. :) I started reading this story today, and haven't stopped since. Now, for me, I love constructive criticism. It's one of those things that isn't so fun receiving but helps me become a better writer and humbler person. I hope you view it the same way and take this review as a way to improve upon your skills. So here it goes. I think the plot line of your story is very hooking and quite good. You definitely have interesting original ideas that are a major asset to any aspiring writer. But along with those ideas/plot points has to be a sort of consistency in your writing. Everything must coincide with each other and 'fit'. In this particular story of yours I found that you had some great ideas for plot twists and interesting turns of events but they weren't executed in a super clear way. So a suggestion to you is to try and write down your ideas in chronological order and then slowly build on your story checking to see if everything makes sense and characters personalities stay pretty constant. I think that was ultimately, the only thing that could be improved in this story. I think you have potential to be an even more amazing writer. Just try and develop clear plot points and consistency in your writing and you'll be set! I hope this review is helpful for you and you actually give my suggestion a try. If not, well, I hope you continue writing anyways. Good job and keep writing! - Redhead
Hi. :) I started reading this story today, and haven't stopped since. Now, for me, I love constructive criticism. It's one of those things that isn't so fun receiving but helps me become a better writer and humbler person. I hope you view it the same way and take this review as a way to improve upon your skills. So here it goes. I think the plot line of your story is very hooking and quite good. You definitely have interesting original ideas that are a major asset to any aspiring writer. But along with those ideas/plot points has to be a sort of consistency in your writing. Everything must coincide with each other and 'fit'. In this particular story of yours I found that you had some great ideas for plot twists and interesting turns of events but they weren't executed in a super clear way. So a suggestion to you is to try and write down your ideas in chronological order and then slowly build on your story checking to see if everything makes sense and characters personalities stay pretty constant. I think that was ultimately, the only thing that could be improved in this story. I think you have potential to be an even more amazing writer. Just try and develop clear plot points and consistency in your writing and you'll be set! I hope this review is helpful for you and you actually give my suggestion a try. If not, well, I hope you continue writing anyways. Good job and keep writing! - Redhead
6/2/2012 c7 
1cheysma2000
I personally think she should let the next door neighbor who can't have children have it.
1cheysma2000I personally think she should let the next door neighbor who can't have children have it.
6/2/2012 c4 cheysma2000
I am enjoying this very much. I am new to the Beck/Tori fanfic but I know what I like.
I am enjoying this very much. I am new to the Beck/Tori fanfic but I know what I like.
6/1/2012 c12 BlurredLines
Omg i started reading this story 2day and i luv it SOOOOO muc great writer!
Omg i started reading this story 2day and i luv it SOOOOO muc great writer!
5/18/2012 c5 iloveyou123
good job
good job
5/18/2012 c4 iloveyou123
Check my bori and other storis out please? Cant wait to read the next chapter
Check my bori and other storis out please? Cant wait to read the next chapter
5/18/2012 c3 iloveyou123
I feel bad for alexia toris daughter!
I feel bad for alexia toris daughter!
5/18/2012 c2 iloveyou123
good job, i like it
good job, i like it
5/18/2012 c1 iloveyou123
good, it could be a little longer
good, it could be a little longer
3/13/2012 c30 1alwaysthinking101
awww that was sooo sweet, i loved it, even though im a huge bade fan i guess jade doing something really bad makes it ok :) i hate it when beck does something bad tho.
good job :) xx ps. i barley took my eyes off it
1alwaysthinking101awww that was sooo sweet, i loved it, even though im a huge bade fan i guess jade doing something really bad makes it ok :) i hate it when beck does something bad tho.
good job :) xx ps. i barley took my eyes off it
2/22/2012 c10 Boriforever
Can I please go kill ashley and nick? Oh AND aaron?
Can I please go kill ashley and nick? Oh AND aaron?