for The real me12/4/2011 c1 
5LilMizSun
-I'm very happy you decided to post your story! Lavits is one of my all time favorite characters as well and the game did NOT give him enough time before killing him off! DX
-Her name is very interesting and memorable, PIPER.
You have a lot of grammar errors, but I can't really talk because I'm not all that great at it either.
-!But it would be a much more fun read if came back and gave it a little fix-up!
Her story reminds me of Darts in the start. I can't figure out if she's evil or not. Maybe the evil one is EVE!
5LilMizSun-I'm very happy you decided to post your story! Lavits is one of my all time favorite characters as well and the game did NOT give him enough time before killing him off! DX
-Her name is very interesting and memorable, PIPER.
You have a lot of grammar errors, but I can't really talk because I'm not all that great at it either.
-!But it would be a much more fun read if came back and gave it a little fix-up!
Her story reminds me of Darts in the start. I can't figure out if she's evil or not. Maybe the evil one is EVE!