for Falling9/4/2021 c1 Guest
A. The most beautiful soltory I have ever read and hopefully my grade in biology. Thank you, oh brilliant author for sharing your infinite wisdom. We are all grateful for you!
A. The most beautiful soltory I have ever read and hopefully my grade in biology. Thank you, oh brilliant author for sharing your infinite wisdom. We are all grateful for you!
4/5/2012 c3 Melodyy
I hope you update soon! I love this! :)
I hope you update soon! I love this! :)
4/1/2012 c3 
1FreakishlyMee
This story is getting better and better! I love the sarcasm in this chapter. It'll be nice if you update fast (for a change :P)
1FreakishlyMeeThis story is getting better and better! I love the sarcasm in this chapter. It'll be nice if you update fast (for a change :P)
11/16/2011 c1 1FreakishlyMee
I don't usually read Rose/Scorpius but this time I'll make an exception. Your story seems awesome. It's amazing how much you've improved since your first fanfic. Keep writing! :D
1FreakishlyMeeI don't usually read Rose/Scorpius but this time I'll make an exception. Your story seems awesome. It's amazing how much you've improved since your first fanfic. Keep writing! :D
11/2/2011 c1 anon
The biggest, most glaring error I noticed is that Rose keeps referring to Albus as her brother. They're cousins, not siblings.
Other than that, you just need a beta reader. There are a lot of little mistakes - grammar, punctuation, etc. - that are distracting and confusing to the reader. A fresh pair of eyes will help to catch those and correct them.
Your plot is definitely intriguing. You've got the suspense thing going and I'm curious to see where you go with it.
The biggest, most glaring error I noticed is that Rose keeps referring to Albus as her brother. They're cousins, not siblings.
Other than that, you just need a beta reader. There are a lot of little mistakes - grammar, punctuation, etc. - that are distracting and confusing to the reader. A fresh pair of eyes will help to catch those and correct them.
Your plot is definitely intriguing. You've got the suspense thing going and I'm curious to see where you go with it.