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1/5/2014 c30 Guest
I really do not think it is a good idea to refer to a co-writer as Idiot or Moron or Coward.
1/5/2014 c30 Guest
My two favorite legendaries, Mew and Victini, are ENEMIES!?
1/5/2014 c30 Guest
I think Key2DestNE is a great writer. I would like to read his solo work. Or her solo work. Two people writing is interesting, but, the true tests of an author come down to them finding their own voice. Plus it is easier to create a collection of stories for future publication and maybe someday soon , get paid for writing. Beats working in a pizza shop.
1/5/2014 c30 Bemony-Menisha
more "Mew Curse Dolls" now that Mew found you :)
1/5/2014 c30 9auraRilou
...Arceus dang it, Mew, I've lost count of how many times you've done these things! Seriously, you're worse than my Meema at times... although now I'm worried about a certain someone else. ESPECIALLY after finding out that there's ANOTHER Legendary Child out there...

...although if said certain someone shows up in Part II: SoTR, I think he'll be bringing a Shadow of his own with him, in the form of a purple Riolu/Lucario. Not to mention his connection with 'Foxfire'. And he also has the 'potential', but in a different way. I mean, it makes a bit more sense why he has his power if you know the root cause of it... Which would also mean that only now would he properly show up, seeing how Mew's just created some of the stuff which kinda connects to him, like the Mega Sto... Crud, almost gave a major hint as to the source of his power there...

Anyway, I digress. DFK, good job with this segment. I would also thank K2D, but... well, She's caused problems which prevent me from doing so.

?: Seriously, I sometimes wonder if it would had been better if Father came first...

What are you doing here? You're way too early to be here...

?: Well, in terms of your story, yes, but... I need to have a word with Her, because She might need to know about someone who'll most likely be dumped in Her timeline's 'present' soon. Good thing I was able to exploit something I'd learned thanks to Auro to make sure a certain someone had no memory...

...Fine, then. Good luck with that, 'Time Lord'.

?: Why do you keep calling me that?!

Because that's what I named you in my Sky file! At least in that I let you help the duo with dealing with your sister.

?: Well, you better work on finishing the next chapter of either PotK or VfB soon, or else I'll get her to Spacial Rend you!

Okay, okay! I get the picture... I'll work on it as soon as I can, okay?

?: You better keep your word...

Trust me. If having to deal with Legendaries like you has taught me one thing, it's to always keep your word when you say you'll do something for one of them. D almost gave me nightmares due to how I didn't put him directly in something I'm working on - something I've been talking to you about, seeing as it involves stuff similar to that in Sky...

?: Can you please stop rambling? I may have a lot of Time on my side, but the same doesn't apply to you...

Got it. Shutting up now...
1/5/2014 c3 14See That Guy
I like it plot-wise. It's a type of story I've not seen before, which is always good. There are some spelling and grammar mistakes that distract me a little from the story. They aren't enough to make the story illegible, but they are noticeable.
First of all, if you're using dialogue and ending with "he said" or "she said" or "said Joe" or "said Schmo", you end the quote with a comma, not a period.
"See for yourself." Ash said proudly as he showed Brock the Cascade Badge.
It should be:
"See for yourself," said Ash, proudly showing Brock the new badge.

The former way will almost always leave you with at least one sentence fragment.

The spelling errors can be remedied by a few proofreads, or even the People's Republic of Google. Believe me. It works.
The narration is meh, in my opinion. I like it, but I don't like the random author notes in some parts. Granted, I've done that before myself, but it isn't a good way to go about the story. It can pull someone with a fleeting attention span like me out of the story like THAT. Yes, I snapped my fingers.
To remedy, just wait until the chapter/part has concluded, and post it at the end.

The plot is a redeeming factor, of course. I very much enjoy it, and I can see a lot of passion in this story. It certainly feels like you enjoyed writing it, and the multiple chapters to a part idea is pulled off very well. You did a great job there.

Mind the story, nonetheless. As long as you don't start to use "HP" or "Level Ups", or things of that matter, you're golden.
8/10. Good work so far.
1/5/2014 c30 2XionRed
sorry, but I prefer just your job :/
1/5/2014 c30 3daniboy95
hmmm... if you haven't planned the whole fanfic already I wondered if you had planned for somekind of minor fight between Mew and Ash later? could be interesting if Mew got overprotective, because of what happened this chapter, and Ash lashed out on her at some point and they had a fight for at least a chapter or two.
1/5/2014 c30 14PhantomGirl12
Wow, that was a really long chapter! I like Brock and Misty, but I get that they needed to leave, so no rampage from me, haha. I must ask though, will they ever actually find out about Mew? Anyway, amazing story, can't wait for the next one! Will you be posting a notice when the sequel is up?
1/4/2014 c24 2A'stories10
Team Hikari: Axew named Skyflame (me) and a Tepig named something to do with fire (not really sure its been a long time since i played gates to infinity cause I've been so busy with school) love the story its awesome
1/4/2014 c30 WhiteEagle1985
Interesting way to end the first book in this series!
1/4/2014 c30 5Crazed King
Plushies...Mein Gott.
Anyhow, whoo hoo! Oh wait.
Now I'll have to wait again. NOOO!
Nice to meet you Key, thanks for your hard work. You too Kit-san!
1/4/2014 c9 Sunny
I agree with you on Arceus. Though I think that they were created at the same time instead. Mew creating pokemon while Arceus created the world, time, space, and distortion.
1/4/2014 c30 8Dragon Courage
This was the perfect ending;) cant wait for the sequel
1/4/2014 c30 5ultima-owner
Victini has an arrogant kid
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