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8/11/2019 c1 Guest
Well written piece. Sad story...
7/13/2017 c1 SarahMay
Jeez where do I begin, first of all I'm sobbing, second I'm sobbing, and third I'm sobbing! Beautifully written, terribly sad, but I think in a way we can either see two different endings to My Fair Lady/Pygmalion, the happy one where Eliza returns and everything is jolly good, but here we saw the more depressing side which in this case resulted in Eliza's death. Good work. ~ SarahMay
11/12/2014 c1 daydreaming87
Beautiful! Henry really loved her...
11/7/2012 c1 14Jael73
Hmm...I feel like you have a story here that doesn't have to end with Eliza's death. We all know Freddy would have left her if she would have married him, so what about her needing to accept that there's only one man that loves her?
10/9/2012 c1 49cilepe
If only they both weren't so proud and stubborn...
11/3/2011 c1 1liesallies
A very nice piece, I liked it. You are very good at using the first person to bring out the emotion of the story. I think you could further strengthen the piece by allowing for certain ambiguities. By cutting out the simile of Eliza's life to the candle, you would actually strengthen that connection. It might more potent to let that comparison to remain a unspoken metaphor, rather than a direct simile.

Similarly, by removing the last two sentences of sixth paragraph, where Eliza mentions her own death, you can increase the dramatic suspension and heighten the emotional response of the audience even further. Overall though, I thought you ended the piece very well. I very much enjoyed it.

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