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7/25/2020 c35 Jostanos
A Dark Elf has been able to join Kushina and Company into the World Tree, however, may they all reach Migard? or may they each arrive in different realms?
7/25/2020 c35 1R-king 93
Awesome chapter
7/24/2020 c35 9Dragon Man 180
Hmmm, the dark elf might find himself with more than he counts on when he doesn't have the home field advantage.
7/24/2020 c35 15Leaf Ranger
Oh no, the dark elf got through. Damn.

hopefully they'll be able to escape him for now. Guess we'll see.

Good chapter, keep it up!
7/24/2020 c35 Starfire99
Glad to see a new chapter of this story. I was starting to get a little worried. I was wondering, why are all the chapters for multiple stories released at the same time? Wouldn't it be better to release the chapters as you finish them? Unless you work on all the chapters simultaneously, I was wondering the reason why?
7/24/2020 c35 100VFSNAKE
Awesome! They escaped and are heading home. Hopefully, Konoha will be more friendly to Naruto and his group.
7/24/2020 c35 4Gamelover41592
excellent work on this chapter and hopefully they can push back the dark elves
7/24/2020 c35 46Animaman
Well, now we get to see what Naruto and the others end up returning to, along with the condition of Konoha under Jiraiya's rule. Along with if Zara ends up having to pay the ultimate price for her actions.
7/7/2020 c34 Ryu wolf
Great job with this chapter nicely done, can’t wait to read the next chapter.
7/2/2020 c34 Logic Core
Did the Muppet Queen seriously send people after Kushina who want her dead? If she wanted Naruto dead, it would have been so much easier to have him killed earlier, because the child of the Red Death, and his mates, will be snuffed out as well. Seriously, there is doing the wrong thing, then there is only doing the wrong thing.

I agree with Zara's daughter: the queen only sees a penis, one she probably wants to hop on in spite of it being her nephew's. She's a brainless slut, through and through. And with her daughter abandoning the castle, I don't see Sasa letting her peerlessly incompetent daughter remain in power for long.
7/2/2020 c33 Logic Core
So the Succubi are ready to stop succubi from fleeing, but no other races? Talk about egotistical. It is almost like they believe that they are the only sentient race of worth, as well as the only ones in their country. That is also in spite of it being implied that at least humans and elves also populate the kingdom. It is only a matter of time before Ai no Kuni falls due to the sheer magnitude of stupidity within its borders. The country is literally too stupid to live. No, that whole realm is too stupid to live.

It is almost like Zara wants to sleep with Naruto herself. She is also brainless because, right after admitting someone else is right and that it is dangerous to make an enemy out of Kushina, she just bulldozes ahead and does it anyway. Please, PLEASE, politically 'intrigue' her, preferably with a knife to her throat.

I don't know why they are worried about an attack from Alfhiem. All they have to do is return to Midgard and badly damage the tree. Even if it doesn't die, the connection will be damaged until the tree heals itself, which could take centuries on Midgard's side. The succubi and Ai no Kuni will have long since been wiped out by Queen Muppet's barely functioning brain.

While on that subject, just go to Snow or somewhere else Naruto has been. Snow has ninja, samurai and chakra armor, not to mention Koyuki at least favors him. They could wait there, and since Jiraiya wanted Koyuki in an Icha Icha movie, it would make sense for him or a ninja of his choosing to go there and back on a semi-regular basis. I believe the true reason you are keeping him from those places is so that his incubus aura doesn't draw in the heroines from those arcs/movies.
7/2/2020 c32 Logic Core
Should have finished the chapter before posting, but the quality of your writing has deteriorated from the earlier chapters.

Have you ever been in a fight? Even a seasoned fighter wouldn't just bounce back from being elbowed in the throat, especially since the only way Ayame could have done it was by thrusting her elbow into his neck while running at him, which is worse than a backwards jab because it has the person's weight behind it. Anton should be coughing and wheezing, barely able to see properly, not pulling out a dagger and stabbing with any degree of accuracy, forget being able to stand back up and aim properly, then gloat. Him being an elf makes the injury worse, since elves tend to be fragile, hence why they prefer archery over melee combat.

I don't know if anyone told you this or not, but when Tayuya was introduced, she was only fourteen years old, not in her thirties like she would have to be in this story. Just thought you should know that.

I'm guessing that Tayuya's transformation has become something like a Sage Mode, since she appears to be manipulating natural energy to form extension to her body that only sages can see, which also means the transformation has yet to extend to her eyes, or maybe the artificial sage transformation would have never granted that ability. Either way, she'll need to train with the toads or something to master her power, or else she's going to go shredding everything apart with her invisible claws.

Nice to see that Zara's being a complete muppet isn't genetic. Please have someone execute the mad queen before she does something truly dire.
7/2/2020 c32 Logic Core
For logic's sake, how did Zara beat Kushina in speed and stamina? There is no way that a queen, whose most strenuous activity is crouching cowgirl style or withstanding a 'gang bang,' could beat someone who is a legend as both a ninja and a succubus! Whether it be flight, running or swimming, Zara should be MASSIVELY slower than Kushina, easily allowing the former kunoichi to outpace her in any extended race. Even Kushina lampshaded it, so as you Americans would say, what in the actual blue fuck?!

It would have made far more sense for Kushina to show up, say it was time to go, then have the group run into hordes of soldiers the out of breath queen sent in her place.
7/1/2020 c28 Logic Core
Just going to say this, I didn't think the reviews about Zara being a muppet were true. If anything, they seem to be understating her lack of mental acuity. I normally try to poke holes in stories so people learn, but Zara herself is a big hole, and completely intentional.
7/1/2020 c21 Logic Core
Pretty sure the commander of a ninja force has to be a ninja, and Kushina already said that succubi only possess mana, not chakra. That means that, in the eyes of the law, Tsunade would be a chakra barren civilian, completely unfit for any shinobi duties, being an active Kage being included on the list. Even if that wasn't the case, her remaining Hokage just gives the civilians and their mercenary ninja ammo, since she would be a civilian in charge of Konoha.

(slow clap) Nice job breaking the entire civil unrest part of your story.
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