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2Bleuwolf13
EEEP AN UPDATE! :-D
Warm fuzzies...but what about Rika-from-home?
This fanfiction is now happy again. :-P But why do I think it'll only last until next chapter...?
Thanks for updating, and keep writing!
2Bleuwolf13EEEP AN UPDATE! :-D
Warm fuzzies...but what about Rika-from-home?
This fanfiction is now happy again. :-P But why do I think it'll only last until next chapter...?
Thanks for updating, and keep writing!
1/20/2014 c45 1Jovie Black
YES! YEAAAHHS! I FRICKING LOVE IT! you have absolutely no idea how happy i get when ever i see that you updated. This was a fantastic chapter and im very happy Rika wasn't evil in the end and that sirius Finally goes back! UPDATE SOON! 3
1Jovie BlackYES! YEAAAHHS! I FRICKING LOVE IT! you have absolutely no idea how happy i get when ever i see that you updated. This was a fantastic chapter and im very happy Rika wasn't evil in the end and that sirius Finally goes back! UPDATE SOON! 3
1/6/2014 c44 VentilatorsYelp
Man, it's been a while.
I remember it was fall or winter 2011 when I first stumbled upon this story in the newly updated fanfiction pile. You caught my interest right away with the interesting idea. I remember laughing uncontrollably at the "concoosed!" chapter. That was kind of a bad season for me - I spent way too much time on fanfiction, and I think I checked this every week for updates or something, and did a victory dance whenever I found you updated. Like I said - wow. Been a while. More than two years.
Anyway, I recently came back to this; not sure why. And, man, I remember this. All the wild stuff. And the way it started turning grimmer halfway through. And the new characters you brought into it - not just Damon and Kayla, but Puck, who was pretty legit, and Link and Rune.
So... sorry to hear that you lost your passion for this. You seemed to really enjoy writing it, and I was happy for you. But this new dimension stuff is really interesting. Vastly different from the more lighthearted stuff you wrote before, but also good in its own way.
Hopefully you update soon, though, and resolve the cliffy. But don't push yourself to write anything you don't want to write, and don't strain yourself - if your wrists still haven't gotten better yet... your health is more important. :)
Man, it's been a while.
I remember it was fall or winter 2011 when I first stumbled upon this story in the newly updated fanfiction pile. You caught my interest right away with the interesting idea. I remember laughing uncontrollably at the "concoosed!" chapter. That was kind of a bad season for me - I spent way too much time on fanfiction, and I think I checked this every week for updates or something, and did a victory dance whenever I found you updated. Like I said - wow. Been a while. More than two years.
Anyway, I recently came back to this; not sure why. And, man, I remember this. All the wild stuff. And the way it started turning grimmer halfway through. And the new characters you brought into it - not just Damon and Kayla, but Puck, who was pretty legit, and Link and Rune.
So... sorry to hear that you lost your passion for this. You seemed to really enjoy writing it, and I was happy for you. But this new dimension stuff is really interesting. Vastly different from the more lighthearted stuff you wrote before, but also good in its own way.
Hopefully you update soon, though, and resolve the cliffy. But don't push yourself to write anything you don't want to write, and don't strain yourself - if your wrists still haven't gotten better yet... your health is more important. :)
1/1/2014 c35 3Percy Grimm
This was wonderfully fantastically etc Twins how dare they drop out I'm with on this one (just not the Sirius fault thing)!
3Percy GrimmThis was wonderfully fantastically etc Twins how dare they drop out I'm with on this one (just not the Sirius fault thing)!
12/29/2013 c44 carick of hunter moon
Your central character Rika is well written she is alive, she jumps off the page and grabs hold of you saying look at me, pay attention, and your ability to characterise is the strength of your writing, the story arc flows well and softly develops the plot arc, there are very well crafted ideas and character development Rika pain at what she will never have magic a family, children, yet her Joy at living jump of the page she will take what she can get and run with it, but still she is teenager strops and all, the our mix of tech and magic works well, have you move the time line forward ?
No wand and being owned that going to get Hermione going big time (slavery and House elf aka SPEW) so what would she do about Rika, to do nothing would be very out of character for her and yes I know the strength of your story is you have done what the best fan-fiction writer’s do and gone OC and add something new to the story but Hermione is Hermione
Part of your story reminded me of an old saying “There is magic in the music and the music in me” Bardic magic is old magic deep magic and needs not a wand to do. As to the toad spot on if anything worse than canon well done.
The development of the dark and light sides of the war works very well got to love werewolf politics’ and Rika and Draco escape well written action seen and the Rika (chapter 33) speech to the order some of your best writing so far, the development of the plot idea of the flower is very interesting and one of those plot hooks that catch the reader (my) interest good
Barely a chapter work well, as there is no need to retell a story cannon and tell it by combat flashes from Rika point of view work for your story, next chapter ?! Well done creating a mystery all ways works well in a story NONONONONONO
One of the hardest thing to do as a writer is call time on a story when you burn out it happens the story fuel runs out my advice is stop before you destroy good writing with bad writing I would suggest creating a challenge out of your story and plot idea and then post it good luck with your future stories that and put the story to bed for a time and go on to write something else to help you get round the block do not be afraid to edit your story if a plot idea or a direction is not working bin/scrap it and take the story in a different direction. The more you write the better writer you become and remember as long as it is fun to write a story it will come out all well in the end
Thank you for your hard work and I my review as I was reading your story
Carick
Your central character Rika is well written she is alive, she jumps off the page and grabs hold of you saying look at me, pay attention, and your ability to characterise is the strength of your writing, the story arc flows well and softly develops the plot arc, there are very well crafted ideas and character development Rika pain at what she will never have magic a family, children, yet her Joy at living jump of the page she will take what she can get and run with it, but still she is teenager strops and all, the our mix of tech and magic works well, have you move the time line forward ?
No wand and being owned that going to get Hermione going big time (slavery and House elf aka SPEW) so what would she do about Rika, to do nothing would be very out of character for her and yes I know the strength of your story is you have done what the best fan-fiction writer’s do and gone OC and add something new to the story but Hermione is Hermione
Part of your story reminded me of an old saying “There is magic in the music and the music in me” Bardic magic is old magic deep magic and needs not a wand to do. As to the toad spot on if anything worse than canon well done.
The development of the dark and light sides of the war works very well got to love werewolf politics’ and Rika and Draco escape well written action seen and the Rika (chapter 33) speech to the order some of your best writing so far, the development of the plot idea of the flower is very interesting and one of those plot hooks that catch the reader (my) interest good
Barely a chapter work well, as there is no need to retell a story cannon and tell it by combat flashes from Rika point of view work for your story, next chapter ?! Well done creating a mystery all ways works well in a story NONONONONONO
One of the hardest thing to do as a writer is call time on a story when you burn out it happens the story fuel runs out my advice is stop before you destroy good writing with bad writing I would suggest creating a challenge out of your story and plot idea and then post it good luck with your future stories that and put the story to bed for a time and go on to write something else to help you get round the block do not be afraid to edit your story if a plot idea or a direction is not working bin/scrap it and take the story in a different direction. The more you write the better writer you become and remember as long as it is fun to write a story it will come out all well in the end
Thank you for your hard work and I my review as I was reading your story
Carick
12/29/2013 c6 3Percy Grimm
This one is seriously funny kuz Rika was Loopy lOopy looPy loopY!
your fan,MercedesBlack
P.S Rika should say kuz! btw sorry for the LOOPy thing :(
3Percy GrimmThis one is seriously funny kuz Rika was Loopy lOopy looPy loopY!
your fan,MercedesBlack
P.S Rika should say kuz! btw sorry for the LOOPy thing :(