for Help of a Seer1/11/2018 c26 
3jadethetroll
wow. i really liked this story. i really appreciate that you highlighted/marked passages that had triggers in them.
Storywise i am totally into the clan-building theme and i think you nailed that pretty good. While i often read storys of sorta-clan-building around Harry there are normally no adults (at least not mature ones - Sirius has missed a lot in that regard) involved because of his distrust. And while i'm started out prefering adult-less stories i can, now that i am maturer, see the benefit the adults brought to the mental health of all involved.
You incorporated Lunas Seer talent and her visions good into the continuency and during this first read i have not noticed any plot holes.
Well done.
3jadethetrollwow. i really liked this story. i really appreciate that you highlighted/marked passages that had triggers in them.
Storywise i am totally into the clan-building theme and i think you nailed that pretty good. While i often read storys of sorta-clan-building around Harry there are normally no adults (at least not mature ones - Sirius has missed a lot in that regard) involved because of his distrust. And while i'm started out prefering adult-less stories i can, now that i am maturer, see the benefit the adults brought to the mental health of all involved.
You incorporated Lunas Seer talent and her visions good into the continuency and during this first read i have not noticed any plot holes.
Well done.
12/28/2017 c26 ljgmlg2
Very good story! I've read hundreds of fanfics and this is truly an original one! Must read!
Very good story! I've read hundreds of fanfics and this is truly an original one! Must read!
11/20/2017 c15 vysirez
I know this is an older story but I wanted to say I have a bit of a problem with Amelia's threat against Luna here. Since the clan was using Luna's abilities to react to attacks, what Amelia just did was basically threaten to imprison Luna unless she agreed to serve the DMLE. Legally I can't see how Luna could be required to give advance notice to the DMLE of attacks, so Ameliea is basically threatening prison to force Luna to work for them. I kno it doesn't make much difference to the story since Luna goes along with it.
I know this is an older story but I wanted to say I have a bit of a problem with Amelia's threat against Luna here. Since the clan was using Luna's abilities to react to attacks, what Amelia just did was basically threaten to imprison Luna unless she agreed to serve the DMLE. Legally I can't see how Luna could be required to give advance notice to the DMLE of attacks, so Ameliea is basically threatening prison to force Luna to work for them. I kno it doesn't make much difference to the story since Luna goes along with it.
9/15/2017 c17 Smutley D W
Seems lame insane to make Hannah bear rapist's child. Plus the choices seemed rather dumb, birth control vs pain relief and quicker recovery. Other than nutty anti-birth control magic culture POV, nonsensical she's written up as pregnant.
Seems lame insane to make Hannah bear rapist's child. Plus the choices seemed rather dumb, birth control vs pain relief and quicker recovery. Other than nutty anti-birth control magic culture POV, nonsensical she's written up as pregnant.
9/15/2017 c10 Smutley Do Wrong
On mobile no telling without switching to not mobile view, if long abandoned or complete.
So just a short suggestion:
Considering general werewolf portrayal as SUPER FAST SUPER STRONG super resilient.
Close quarters seems VERY RISKY.
Cap and ball, very clumsy hard to master marksmanship.
Blunderbuss and dragoon seem better fit.
Much better, simply use bullet reloader tools to load silver bullets into regular casings, of modern firearms.
Double ditto for shotgun shells.
Kill at distance first blood: via rifle with silver bullets. Werewolves charge, drop rifle and pick up shotgun with shells loaded with silver shot. Or sawed off shotgun, a better modern version of blunderbuss. For silver as toxic effect, drilling and other modification of silver projectiles, to make silver fragments and "poison" instead of pass thru and out the target.
Snape is a potion master, how about potions for gassing or blowing up the group, to get them in disarray, delayed in counterattacking?
Heck, make or pack silver around grenade or any explosive. They have magicals, stealing from rich fart gun clubs or military armory not hard, no need to buy in USA. Plus some of Europe have much looser gun laws, guns for sale or theft.
On mobile no telling without switching to not mobile view, if long abandoned or complete.
So just a short suggestion:
Considering general werewolf portrayal as SUPER FAST SUPER STRONG super resilient.
Close quarters seems VERY RISKY.
Cap and ball, very clumsy hard to master marksmanship.
Blunderbuss and dragoon seem better fit.
Much better, simply use bullet reloader tools to load silver bullets into regular casings, of modern firearms.
Double ditto for shotgun shells.
Kill at distance first blood: via rifle with silver bullets. Werewolves charge, drop rifle and pick up shotgun with shells loaded with silver shot. Or sawed off shotgun, a better modern version of blunderbuss. For silver as toxic effect, drilling and other modification of silver projectiles, to make silver fragments and "poison" instead of pass thru and out the target.
Snape is a potion master, how about potions for gassing or blowing up the group, to get them in disarray, delayed in counterattacking?
Heck, make or pack silver around grenade or any explosive. They have magicals, stealing from rich fart gun clubs or military armory not hard, no need to buy in USA. Plus some of Europe have much looser gun laws, guns for sale or theft.
9/8/2017 c26 lmill123
I really loved reading this story and I loved the ending. Loved how certain people got what they deserved. Was sad at the loss of Molly, Ron and Ginny, but in the new order of things and the changes I feel they wouldn't have adjusted well and wouldn't have gotten past what Harry ended up doing to Dumbledore. Always believed that Ron and Ginny were too much under the thumb of Molly and her way of thinking. Despite what she claimed, she was very narrow minded. Looking forward to reading more of your stories
I really loved reading this story and I loved the ending. Loved how certain people got what they deserved. Was sad at the loss of Molly, Ron and Ginny, but in the new order of things and the changes I feel they wouldn't have adjusted well and wouldn't have gotten past what Harry ended up doing to Dumbledore. Always believed that Ron and Ginny were too much under the thumb of Molly and her way of thinking. Despite what she claimed, she was very narrow minded. Looking forward to reading more of your stories
8/31/2017 c8 Guest
how the hell is longbottom lord black make's no sense based on the way they run tings in magical Britain
how the hell is longbottom lord black make's no sense based on the way they run tings in magical Britain
6/7/2017 c26 mab70
Marvelous story! I am very glad I found this to read.
Thank you for sharing your talent!
Marvelous story! I am very glad I found this to read.
Thank you for sharing your talent!
5/31/2017 c1 leiiliita
This story is really nice and I like the couples you did , Harry and Luna have so much potential together , but here is the dilemnaI like the involvement of the non magical world , and the active role of nearly all the adult , But I can't help my feeling that it's a little easy I mean of course They have to deal with killing , but they have so much superiority than their enemiesa very very competent seerby the way she is Mary sue borderline for me(no offense) even if at the end she loose her gift and prove at multiple times That she is not perfect) , "the lovegood magic", the help of the muggle world, a very well protected and hidden refuge and so on ...
Despite this I really loved to read your story ! Kisses S.
This story is really nice and I like the couples you did , Harry and Luna have so much potential together , but here is the dilemnaI like the involvement of the non magical world , and the active role of nearly all the adult , But I can't help my feeling that it's a little easy I mean of course They have to deal with killing , but they have so much superiority than their enemiesa very very competent seerby the way she is Mary sue borderline for me(no offense) even if at the end she loose her gift and prove at multiple times That she is not perfect) , "the lovegood magic", the help of the muggle world, a very well protected and hidden refuge and so on ...
Despite this I really loved to read your story ! Kisses S.
5/26/2017 c26 Guest
Wow, this is very good.
Wow, this is very good.
5/8/2017 c26 1Bearmauls
Enjoyable. I think the cast of characters got a little too large towards the end for me to really feel focused and connected to everything going on, but certainly worth the reading time. It's annoyingly hard to find a good Harry/Luna story, especially one that doesn't treat Luna as a manic pixie dream girl with little to contribute besides humorous one-liners.
1BearmaulsEnjoyable. I think the cast of characters got a little too large towards the end for me to really feel focused and connected to everything going on, but certainly worth the reading time. It's annoyingly hard to find a good Harry/Luna story, especially one that doesn't treat Luna as a manic pixie dream girl with little to contribute besides humorous one-liners.
5/8/2017 c21 Bearmauls
It seems a bit odd that they are able and willing to involve the non-magical government, but not to the extent that it would solve all their problems. A known location and time in an isolated area is a perfect opportunity to involve the military in a significant way. Added bonus if you pair wizards with them to make them invisible. Or even just airdrop a large explosive onto the ceremony, take em all out in one fell swoop.
It seems a bit odd that they are able and willing to involve the non-magical government, but not to the extent that it would solve all their problems. A known location and time in an isolated area is a perfect opportunity to involve the military in a significant way. Added bonus if you pair wizards with them to make them invisible. Or even just airdrop a large explosive onto the ceremony, take em all out in one fell swoop.
5/7/2017 c12 Bearmauls
Is the option that Robyn refuses to discuss healing Hannah and then getting an abortion if she conceives? Cause it is seriously not cool for a medical professional to restrict the medical advice they offer to a patient based on their personal opinions. Makes me lose a lot of respect for Ms Granger.
Is the option that Robyn refuses to discuss healing Hannah and then getting an abortion if she conceives? Cause it is seriously not cool for a medical professional to restrict the medical advice they offer to a patient based on their personal opinions. Makes me lose a lot of respect for Ms Granger.
5/7/2017 c10 Bearmauls
I don't think you would need an old-school revolver to accomplish this. It's fairly easy to handload even modern ammunition, or to cast your own bullets for them. It was a nice bit of history, though :)
I don't think you would need an old-school revolver to accomplish this. It's fairly easy to handload even modern ammunition, or to cast your own bullets for them. It was a nice bit of history, though :)