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12/29/2011 c1 118katrina
Well this sounds very interesting. :) I can tell you worked hard on this story. Ive been trying to find a "dark" story with OCs in it. I just hope they're not Mary-Sues. -_-

Just a tip: There is NOTHING wrong with your story so far. Im totally in love with it. But you said that Alex had 7 friends. Oh my, that is a lot of OCs. There is nothing wrong with that. But most authors make the mistake of throwing all their OCs at you in one chapter. I once saw an author have 10 OCs abd introduced them all in just 1 chapter. You should bring out a few OCs in each chapter so that you wont confuse anybody.

Like I said before. Your story is PERFECT so far. Im just giving suggestions so that you wont make the same mistake that others did.

Keep up the great job! :) BTW, I love the way you made your own catchphrase. All I have to do is search for the "GOTTA GO! PEACE!" to know if you reviewed. ^_^
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