for An Ounce of Prevention6/5/2012 c1 louise
excellent
excellent
3/29/2012 c1 louise
so happy to finda new gah fic and one with all 3 of them involved...hoep you write more..adn possibly longer fics
thanks for sharing
so happy to finda new gah fic and one with all 3 of them involved...hoep you write more..adn possibly longer fics
thanks for sharing
2/3/2012 c1 louise
awesome ..so nice to have new gah fic especially on einvolvinga ll 3 characters.they worked well together and plot was great..felt like an episode.hope you write more
thanks for sharing
louise
awesome ..so nice to have new gah fic especially on einvolvinga ll 3 characters.they worked well together and plot was great..felt like an episode.hope you write more
thanks for sharing
louise
1/10/2012 c1 Kirajenlove
That was a very short story, but a nice read. It had a very simple plot. I'm afraid the villains were very 2-dimensional, and one didn't really feel threatened by them, especially knowing how easy it would be for Ralph to cleanup with them. Now, admittedly, many GAH episodes DO have 2-dimensional villains, but one of the best GAH villains was Sheila Redman, who was a complex character. She actually appeared to be threatening, like she might actually hurt Ralph. A good story has 3-dimensional characters on both sides; a good villain is an antihero. This story is all right if your purpose was to just create a short, enjoyable story for the fans, but if you are ever interested in creating a multi-chapter story with complex characters and a more involved plot, you might want to take those points into consideration.
Keep writing! :)
That was a very short story, but a nice read. It had a very simple plot. I'm afraid the villains were very 2-dimensional, and one didn't really feel threatened by them, especially knowing how easy it would be for Ralph to cleanup with them. Now, admittedly, many GAH episodes DO have 2-dimensional villains, but one of the best GAH villains was Sheila Redman, who was a complex character. She actually appeared to be threatening, like she might actually hurt Ralph. A good story has 3-dimensional characters on both sides; a good villain is an antihero. This story is all right if your purpose was to just create a short, enjoyable story for the fans, but if you are ever interested in creating a multi-chapter story with complex characters and a more involved plot, you might want to take those points into consideration.
Keep writing! :)