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3/19/2019 c26 im-okay-mj
Every time I read this I love it even more
5/31/2018 c26 8Legendary Heroes.96
Well this story had me really hooked! I seriously loved it!
8/30/2015 c26 4MagicalJellyfish
Aww, that was really sweet and I am so glad I took the time to read it. And right after I read this I completed the thieves guild quest line. Walk with the shadows.
8/27/2014 c26 11Gearhead Fenton
I really liked your characterization of Brynjolf, and the protagonist. Usually, with Brynjolf stories, the protagonist remains really distant throughout the entire story, which I personally find realy tedious and not worth my time. But Alora's development was smooth and gradual, but not tedious at all. Very well done!
6/7/2014 c26 1happysnail
WAIT I WANT TO KNOW WHAT HAPPENS WHEN DELVIN PROPOSES TO VEX!
Lol, but anyway, as often as the romance with Bryn has been written, I didn't get bored with this fic. Even though I knew what was going to happen, I kept reading to find out what happened next which has to be some kind of black magic. So brava! :)
4/13/2014 c26 12Ec1aire
Asdfghjkl. I just... Can't even... Wow.
5/17/2013 c26 2ice-coldnuka-cola
All of the characters are in character, it's well written and i thoroughly enjoyed reading. Great story!
4/2/2013 c26 4Sovngarde Awaits
that story was amazing! great job! you should be proud of yourself! this is one of the best stories I have read! and I have read a lot! haha great job I loved this story! amazing job! and amazing story!
2/12/2013 c26 8foureyedbabe
That was a really good story! I really enjoyed it!
2/10/2013 c26 2xXx Tinkies xXx
Great story! Keep up the fantastic work! Take care! :)
2/7/2013 c26 claroscuro
Love this story. You're a really interesting writer, and I'm sad that this story is over. It concluded well though.

Here's my critique:

What I liked: Fast and fun to read, didn't make me want to skim or skip over parts, flowed nicely.
What could use work: Some of the dialogue seems a bit cliche or unnatural, some of the scenes seemed repetitive.
What was awesome: Imagery. I love your sense of the visual, and how you told moments through the senses. It sets you apart as a writer. Also, the characters were developed well.

Overall, nicely done. Always keep writing and experimenting. Looking forward to future pieces :)
2/7/2013 c26 2Knotted
Yes, hello, I am your 100th review.

*confetti flies everywhere*

Good, yes.

I really enjoyed your ending. It definitely had the lighthearted feel you were going for. The scene between Karliah and Alora was the best part. I've stated before in my own story that an archer's bow is a very personal thing. Very well done.
As for Bryn and Alora's relationship, I think maybe a bit more could've been included. It was good, but it felt more like the events leading up to a relationship than the events after one has been established. Maybe that's just me, though. I understand the boundaries there and how busy Bryn was.
All in all it was a wonderful chapter and a great way to close the story. I am so excited for you, and I hope I can read some new things you'll write. Going from the beginning of this story to the end, your skill improved tremendously. I love you. Youre only 18, and I can't wait to see more of what you can do if you've got this good of a handle on writing already. Get to achieving that dream!
Knotted
2/7/2013 c26 eep246
Sad this is over but I very much enjoyed this story. Well done
2/5/2013 c25 2xXx Tinkies xXx
Wonderful chapter! Keep up the great work & please continue! Take care! :)
2/1/2013 c25 2Knotted
WOOOOOO! I love it. I especially like the way you described how the guild was growing, and that it caused problems as well as fixed them. I really like that you included Maul. I like him, always have. I read a few scenes ahead of time and told you what I thought of them then, but seeing them in with the rest of it made it even better. I really like this line:

The carriage hit a rather large rock then, causing Vex to nearly fall off her seat. "Watch it!" she snapped at the driver. "We've got fragile cargo back here."

It really captured Vex's personality. It was my favorite line in the whole chapter. Like I said, as writers, we tend to pick out really small favorite parts. But yes! I'm so proud of you for continuing and pushing through and taking a leap of faith into a subject you've never tackled before. You grew as a writer over the past few days, and while you struggled to write a few scenes, you're better because of it. I'm looking forward to seeing how you wrap this all up and conclude this wonderful chapter of your life. It's been a hard year for writing... but you did it!
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