for Sacrificial Second Chance6/27/2019 c6 arata7kasuga
Honestly I think Ivy sounds far cuter between the sisters. I hope he ends up with her instead of the other. Or both, but I definitely prefer Ivy. I don't really like short hair on girls, its very off-putting for me.
Honestly I think Ivy sounds far cuter between the sisters. I hope he ends up with her instead of the other. Or both, but I definitely prefer Ivy. I don't really like short hair on girls, its very off-putting for me.
6/22/2019 c20 Spidersauce
Hm I suppose you wrapped that up fairly nicely. The unconscious occulmency emotional stuff seems a little too convenient but oh well.
I do like this story so far though.
Hm I suppose you wrapped that up fairly nicely. The unconscious occulmency emotional stuff seems a little too convenient but oh well.
I do like this story so far though.
6/22/2019 c19 Spidersauce
Why exactly would Kar send him into this world and not tell him about the Royce stuff, etc.?
This reads to me like you just made that part up as you went along, and that part of it ruins the story a bit for me. Not giving up on it yet, but still.
Why exactly would Kar send him into this world and not tell him about the Royce stuff, etc.?
This reads to me like you just made that part up as you went along, and that part of it ruins the story a bit for me. Not giving up on it yet, but still.
6/22/2019 c14 Spidersauce
I feel like you have Harry a bit too antagonistic and aggressive. You started out characterizing previous-Harry as being subtle af and leaving no evidence, they all had suspicions and no proof. This Harry is blatantly provoking people and starting fights, and it's a bit jarring, imo.
I feel like you have Harry a bit too antagonistic and aggressive. You started out characterizing previous-Harry as being subtle af and leaving no evidence, they all had suspicions and no proof. This Harry is blatantly provoking people and starting fights, and it's a bit jarring, imo.
6/22/2019 c13 Spidersauce
I see him saying something like that as a threat in private, but to publicly declare it, not so much. Desire for sex or no, that was stupid.
I see him saying something like that as a threat in private, but to publicly declare it, not so much. Desire for sex or no, that was stupid.
6/22/2019 c13 Spidersauce
Psst Harry, conjuring is a sixth year skill. Shouldn't do that so easily as a first year, especially since you probably did it nonverbal haha
Psst Harry, conjuring is a sixth year skill. Shouldn't do that so easily as a first year, especially since you probably did it nonverbal haha
5/27/2019 c25 Guest
Loved hope you do more
Loved hope you do more
3/23/2019 c25 
18Deaf Fox Writer
love this. so out of curiosity, what happened to herimone. is she will or going to be friend with him or she chose someone else then Harry? j
18Deaf Fox Writerlove this. so out of curiosity, what happened to herimone. is she will or going to be friend with him or she chose someone else then Harry? j
3/19/2019 c25 Halo Star Wars X-over fan
Yes you know what you are a asshole... 6 years without a single update, with everyone being left at a cliffhanger? That is exceedingly cruel... hope you update soon by the way and that this isn’t abandoned.
Yes you know what you are a asshole... 6 years without a single update, with everyone being left at a cliffhanger? That is exceedingly cruel... hope you update soon by the way and that this isn’t abandoned.