for Sacrificial Second Chance5/4/2018 c18 scyfly
that attack on harry xoukd have been easily solved with a pensieve seeing as you get a 3d image all around including behind you
that attack on harry xoukd have been easily solved with a pensieve seeing as you get a 3d image all around including behind you
5/4/2018 c9 scyfly
its to bad you dont focus more on learning magic, if training your mind will make you like an elf, then you dont go learning new languages but you go learn mind arts
its to bad you dont focus more on learning magic, if training your mind will make you like an elf, then you dont go learning new languages but you go learn mind arts
4/8/2018 c25 Hydrus789
I still cannot believe you ended this and have not continued it for so many years on a cliffhanger
I still cannot believe you ended this and have not continued it for so many years on a cliffhanger
4/8/2018 c23 kyoshi
Good story can't wait for some Death Eaters to join the plot.
Good story can't wait for some Death Eaters to join the plot.
4/6/2018 c7 SomeoneWithTasteDoA
Why would he make a list, with detailed descriptions for each item he stole? He's apparently smart enough to steal all of that, but had to leave a list like that behind? Show - don't tell. This story is hideously bad.
Why would he make a list, with detailed descriptions for each item he stole? He's apparently smart enough to steal all of that, but had to leave a list like that behind? Show - don't tell. This story is hideously bad.
4/6/2018 c2 SomeoneWithTasteDoA
Probably good that you abandoned this. Your grammar is all over the place. Pick a tense and stick to it. Possessive Harry is Harry's not Harries. Jesus, how do you even mess that one up?
Probably good that you abandoned this. Your grammar is all over the place. Pick a tense and stick to it. Possessive Harry is Harry's not Harries. Jesus, how do you even mess that one up?
3/16/2018 c8 Guest
Harry’s a little messed up
Harry’s a little messed up
2/12/2018 c25 
2Zardas1010
I really enjoyed your story, but I don't want to get my hopes up, so I'd really like to know if you are ever going to continue the story. It would be a shame if that weren't the case.
2Zardas1010I really enjoyed your story, but I don't want to get my hopes up, so I'd really like to know if you are ever going to continue the story. It would be a shame if that weren't the case.
1/14/2018 c4 Guest
People don’t change this quickly you should of had him make it more gradual so as not to arouse suspicion
People don’t change this quickly you should of had him make it more gradual so as not to arouse suspicion
1/4/2018 c18 Guest
My brain has melted with all the contradictions of this story. You claim that in this story, harry is smart, but he is easily hit by a spell, casted by a student, from behind. That he is mature, but easily over reacts to malfoy instead of thinking and planning of all the ways he could get back at him, like pranking to rip apart his so called “pride” brick-by-brick. That he has the traits of a slytherin yet he is easily outmanuevered by the simplest of things and doesn’t plan long term.
Honestly, the only thing this guys has going for him is being charming, courageous, and funny but that’s it. If you were looking for a “has all the plans from a to z”, calm, cool, and collected, badass mc, I suggest you look somewhere else.
My brain has melted with all the contradictions of this story. You claim that in this story, harry is smart, but he is easily hit by a spell, casted by a student, from behind. That he is mature, but easily over reacts to malfoy instead of thinking and planning of all the ways he could get back at him, like pranking to rip apart his so called “pride” brick-by-brick. That he has the traits of a slytherin yet he is easily outmanuevered by the simplest of things and doesn’t plan long term.
Honestly, the only thing this guys has going for him is being charming, courageous, and funny but that’s it. If you were looking for a “has all the plans from a to z”, calm, cool, and collected, badass mc, I suggest you look somewhere else.
12/12/2017 c19 Hmm Part 2
You know,... I forgot something.
The ending to this chapter, which cemented the end of the story for many. Do you know the theory that you should never interact with yourself when it comes to time travel? I mean,... it's blatantly discussed in the HP stories, so you should have some knowledge of it.
And yet, you have a second Harry talking to Harry about what Harry should do,... face to face,...
Just another way you threw out your chances of calling this a Harry Potter Story.
You know,... I forgot something.
The ending to this chapter, which cemented the end of the story for many. Do you know the theory that you should never interact with yourself when it comes to time travel? I mean,... it's blatantly discussed in the HP stories, so you should have some knowledge of it.
And yet, you have a second Harry talking to Harry about what Harry should do,... face to face,...
Just another way you threw out your chances of calling this a Harry Potter Story.