for Sacrificial Second Chance11/30/2017 c25 Nytefyre
The events are relayed in an excellent and engrossing manner; however, a little more copyediting would help the fiction overall. Despite that, the quality of the writing has improved over the course of the story.
Unfortunately, based on the dates of the last update, this story seems to have been abandoned.
I would've loved to read more.
Thanks for writing and sharing.
The events are relayed in an excellent and engrossing manner; however, a little more copyediting would help the fiction overall. Despite that, the quality of the writing has improved over the course of the story.
Unfortunately, based on the dates of the last update, this story seems to have been abandoned.
I would've loved to read more.
Thanks for writing and sharing.
11/30/2017 c2 Delta3950
If it weren't for the fact that the poll is over and the story possibly abandoned, I'd suggest giving Gabby the Serafall Leviathan make over. That is to say, a Loli with big breasts.
If it weren't for the fact that the poll is over and the story possibly abandoned, I'd suggest giving Gabby the Serafall Leviathan make over. That is to say, a Loli with big breasts.
11/25/2017 c25 
1Somanjeese
I truly wish you eventually get back to this story. One of the best ive ever read, and ive read alot. All the best to you though, i wish you luck with whatever it is youre doing sir/ma'am.
1SomanjeeseI truly wish you eventually get back to this story. One of the best ive ever read, and ive read alot. All the best to you though, i wish you luck with whatever it is youre doing sir/ma'am.
11/21/2017 c25 1DarwinAGS
Cliffys are great! I can't wait for the next chapter. People should only get annoyed at cliffhangers when they are rubbish, which this is most certainly not. I honestly think you're an amazing writer. Keep up the good work! (I get the CBA thing you've got. I love writing but I never can be bothered to do it. Even so, I reckon you update quicker than I do!)
1DarwinAGSCliffys are great! I can't wait for the next chapter. People should only get annoyed at cliffhangers when they are rubbish, which this is most certainly not. I honestly think you're an amazing writer. Keep up the good work! (I get the CBA thing you've got. I love writing but I never can be bothered to do it. Even so, I reckon you update quicker than I do!)
11/2/2017 c1 Squarekiddo
Its a sad day when a chapter has been through a Beta but several cases of "Harries" abundant.
I personally couldnt care less, I understand exactly what youre trying to say with that, but it wont matter to the people who simple like to point things like this out, like me.
The beauty of having such simple hobbies really, are that it dosnt actually matter if my own grammar and spelling is correct, Im not trying to post my own story.
Its a sad day when a chapter has been through a Beta but several cases of "Harries" abundant.
I personally couldnt care less, I understand exactly what youre trying to say with that, but it wont matter to the people who simple like to point things like this out, like me.
The beauty of having such simple hobbies really, are that it dosnt actually matter if my own grammar and spelling is correct, Im not trying to post my own story.
10/23/2017 c3 InfernoItaliano
I always get annoyed when "gods" get on Harry's case fro not being "a better student". think how ridiculous that sounds for us. We are all still human even if their wizards and for a god to talk about how well they did in school seems utterly ridiculous. Especially because Harry's always like "Oh I'm so sorry and so ashamed I'll do better". Like recognize you did poorly in school but tell the god to fuck off because really? You're a god and all you got to say about me is for my poor schoolwork from the ages of 11-17?
I always get annoyed when "gods" get on Harry's case fro not being "a better student". think how ridiculous that sounds for us. We are all still human even if their wizards and for a god to talk about how well they did in school seems utterly ridiculous. Especially because Harry's always like "Oh I'm so sorry and so ashamed I'll do better". Like recognize you did poorly in school but tell the god to fuck off because really? You're a god and all you got to say about me is for my poor schoolwork from the ages of 11-17?
10/16/2017 c25 Caincrux
Man this was totally interesting. Up right until you played with secret organizations and such.
Man this was totally interesting. Up right until you played with secret organizations and such.
10/16/2017 c1 avidreaderomega
Great story so far however. Very very interesting. Wish you had kept going.
Great story so far however. Very very interesting. Wish you had kept going.
10/16/2017 c1 avidreaderomega
Uhggg, why did you have to abandon this story? It was so interesting. U could have at least added that u abandoned since u had obviously written more on this site.
Uhggg, why did you have to abandon this story? It was so interesting. U could have at least added that u abandoned since u had obviously written more on this site.
10/7/2017 c25 Sir That Guy
Nooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo!
I HATE you right now. I was SO interested in this, but NOOO you had to fucking ABANDON IT!
Sorry, that was a bit strong. I've tried writing before, I know it's harder than it seems. I'm just a bit irritated because I chose to read this when I should be sleeping and now it's just - over. :(
I guess I'll check out your other work then.
Nooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo!
I HATE you right now. I was SO interested in this, but NOOO you had to fucking ABANDON IT!
Sorry, that was a bit strong. I've tried writing before, I know it's harder than it seems. I'm just a bit irritated because I chose to read this when I should be sleeping and now it's just - over. :(
I guess I'll check out your other work then.
9/27/2017 c25 Guest
i love this
i love this
9/20/2017 c25 Lordvoldemort
Your story is amazing . please update soon.
Your story is amazing . please update soon.
8/29/2017 c13 7i8
someone just kill hermoine plz her god damn line sjust annoy the fuck out of me nd its such a gud story too
someone just kill hermoine plz her god damn line sjust annoy the fuck out of me nd its such a gud story too