for Sacrificial Second Chance7/13/2017 c14 
2Zardas1010
I've only read up to this chapter, but I'm really loving it. The story is well thought out and funny and to my surprise you managed to make me hate Neville,one of my favorite characters in the original, but your Neville I just want to punch in the face. I'm looking forward to reading the rest of the story.
2Zardas1010I've only read up to this chapter, but I'm really loving it. The story is well thought out and funny and to my surprise you managed to make me hate Neville,one of my favorite characters in the original, but your Neville I just want to punch in the face. I'm looking forward to reading the rest of the story.
4/24/2017 c13 Guest
The whole premise here is a bit flawed, as 'Harry' is no longer Harry. Karma's 'reward' for being a selfless person is to merge Harry's personality with a psychopath? Harry's original identity has been destroyed; he doesn't exist anymore. So his reward is being able to see his family, and the cost is the death of his personality? Right. Sounds fair.
The whole premise here is a bit flawed, as 'Harry' is no longer Harry. Karma's 'reward' for being a selfless person is to merge Harry's personality with a psychopath? Harry's original identity has been destroyed; he doesn't exist anymore. So his reward is being able to see his family, and the cost is the death of his personality? Right. Sounds fair.
4/24/2017 c11 Guest
The conversation between Harry and Tonks about her near-rape in Hogwarts, along with her feelings for Remus, is one of the most ludicrous things I've ever seen in fanfiction. A 17-year-old girl, fresh out of Hogwarts, shares her deepest desires and fears with an 11-year-old who is basically a stranger or even a former enemy? She finds it okay for Harry to act like her therapist, and dispense 'wisdom?' That's so hilariously stupid that there isn't a word for it.
And for the love of god, get a beta. You literally mispell a word almost every sentence.
The conversation between Harry and Tonks about her near-rape in Hogwarts, along with her feelings for Remus, is one of the most ludicrous things I've ever seen in fanfiction. A 17-year-old girl, fresh out of Hogwarts, shares her deepest desires and fears with an 11-year-old who is basically a stranger or even a former enemy? She finds it okay for Harry to act like her therapist, and dispense 'wisdom?' That's so hilariously stupid that there isn't a word for it.
And for the love of god, get a beta. You literally mispell a word almost every sentence.
4/24/2017 c3 Guest
Just a word of advice, and I'll try not to be too harsh: please don't write stories when you're a hormonal 14-year-old with (how to put this kindly?) a less than perfect grasp of basic English. This is an insecure male adolescent's silly dream, and you'll regret inflicting it on us when you're older.
Just a word of advice, and I'll try not to be too harsh: please don't write stories when you're a hormonal 14-year-old with (how to put this kindly?) a less than perfect grasp of basic English. This is an insecure male adolescent's silly dream, and you'll regret inflicting it on us when you're older.
4/15/2017 c18 Guest
I'm reading this for a second time I'm just hoping that you will restart writing this because it is a unique look upon the Harry Potter universe... please, please, please restart this. Thank you.
I'm reading this for a second time I'm just hoping that you will restart writing this because it is a unique look upon the Harry Potter universe... please, please, please restart this. Thank you.
4/13/2017 c12 Guest
Make Blaise Harry's friend and have him mess up Iris' composure
Make Blaise Harry's friend and have him mess up Iris' composure
4/13/2017 c11 Guest
I know it is the wizarding world but, a romantic relationship between siblings is kinda disgusting. It's like soiling what is supposed to be pure. Isn't it why Harry broke up with Ginny in the first place ? It's like Ginny dating Ron. Urgh *shudders*
I know it is the wizarding world but, a romantic relationship between siblings is kinda disgusting. It's like soiling what is supposed to be pure. Isn't it why Harry broke up with Ginny in the first place ? It's like Ginny dating Ron. Urgh *shudders*
4/12/2017 c25 I'm.Only.Here.To.ReadReview
Hello,
I don't know if you'll read this or if you even use this website anymore, but I just want to let you know that I really, really enjoy this story.
I think it's a shame that this hasn't been updated in years, but I can understand that life can be hard and that there's stuff like work and school that can get in the way and drag you down.
So, while I'm not going to beg you or demand you to put out a new chapter, I want you to know that you have my support and encouragement and I truly mean it when saying that this is amazing and that out of all of the stories I've read on this site, this is one of my top twenty favourite (I say twenty cause I can't think of all of my favourites off the top of my head but you're definitely up there).
And while I don't agree with the negative comments left by people, I have to admit, it is an amusing place to leave your work.
Anyway, that's just my slice of the pie (I don't know if that's an actual saying), so I hope that everything's well, and that you're able to get back to writing soon. :)
Hello,
I don't know if you'll read this or if you even use this website anymore, but I just want to let you know that I really, really enjoy this story.
I think it's a shame that this hasn't been updated in years, but I can understand that life can be hard and that there's stuff like work and school that can get in the way and drag you down.
So, while I'm not going to beg you or demand you to put out a new chapter, I want you to know that you have my support and encouragement and I truly mean it when saying that this is amazing and that out of all of the stories I've read on this site, this is one of my top twenty favourite (I say twenty cause I can't think of all of my favourites off the top of my head but you're definitely up there).
And while I don't agree with the negative comments left by people, I have to admit, it is an amusing place to leave your work.
Anyway, that's just my slice of the pie (I don't know if that's an actual saying), so I hope that everything's well, and that you're able to get back to writing soon. :)
3/28/2017 c2 Guest
Trash story good riddance
Trash story good riddance
3/12/2017 c25 Archleone
This is a pretty amusing spot to abandoning your story. I guess the attempt at motivating yourself failed, seeing as you never touched this story again and only made some half-assed attempts at writing news stories for a short period before disappearing entirely.
This is a pretty amusing spot to abandoning your story. I guess the attempt at motivating yourself failed, seeing as you never touched this story again and only made some half-assed attempts at writing news stories for a short period before disappearing entirely.