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2/7/2012 c2 6ranko lina Inverse
Make Gabrielle same age as Astoria that way they can be in the same class together. Metamorph cause Tonks rules; and not just for her ablities but her characters personality,and she would be a great friend for Harry and more too but saddly you didn't put her in the pairing vote. I still say it made no sense putting tonks and lupin together in canon And me no likey that plus SHE KILL HER EVIL ROWLINGS KILLING THE BEST CHARACTER IN THE STORY. Sorry ranted there for a second. Can't wait to see where this goes.
2/7/2012 c2 Spring Raine
Gabrielle should be the same age as Astoria. I'd say give him a photographic memory. If he hasn't shown any special skill by now Harry won't want to suddenly stand out with a skill that just shouts "hey, look at what I can do!"

What did canon Harry ever do to warrant being stuck with either Lavender or Romilda?
2/7/2012 c2 5plums
I like your setup in chapter two. Its a better reason then most give for random universe hopping harry origins.

I just hope you haven't dug good Harry too large a hole to dig out of. His owl (Hedwig?) obviously doesn't like him, his family already knows he's a thief, and his father questions his loyalty to the family and does so by placing pictures in the room to remind him of the family.

Will you reveal to Harry's parents what happened? Or will it be just the sister who gets the big reveal?
2/7/2012 c2 hpsbdg
No Loki or incest. Eidetic memory
2/7/2012 c2 scottish shadow
I love storys like these Harry gets a family by AU and he can protect them and care for and bring down wrath on all theses that dares harm this family ps have Harry fall in love with a black family member so sirsus and James are like unite the family and power do a copy ability were if he gets a piece of DNA he can become that person and the longer he is that person the more becomes that person eg starts off as look alike then magic abilitys then memorys and so on and later he could shift and age shift so he could do like family magic of other magic
2/7/2012 c2 loginanout
I gave a review in the first chapter that kinda made me sound like an ass. YOu dont have to worry about that this time. This chapter was so good. I loved reading about the darker verson of Harry. I also like the fact that he's going to look like his mother, that can only help when it comes to getting with the girls. I want to see him with the mage sight. It sounds abit like the sharringan from Naruto, but I still want to see it. The only problem I had with this chapter was that it was so short, add some lenth to it and you'll be up there with my other favorite writers.
2/7/2012 c2 3Nightmare Sired Muse
This chapter was way better than the first one. If the rest of your story is as good as this one, then you wont have to worry about reviews for long. As for his power I say Enhanced senses, and reflexs.
2/7/2012 c2 ceo55
Probably an Eidetic memory would be best for this story as Karma can let him have all of the memories and recall of Horcruxes and spells etc. Good chapter and better explanation of the plot line! Looking forward to the next chapter please!

ceo55
2/6/2012 c1 brighteyes343
update soon
2/4/2012 c1 ceo55
Its hard to review a single chapter in a story that is AU, now it is good well thought out chapter and has potential to be a good story! So that said next chapter please!

ceo55
2/4/2012 c1 Nightmare Sired Muse
I've seen a few people try, this story, I hope you dont drop like many others have.
2/4/2012 c1 loginanout
It was an okay start. You can inprove. I look forward to you becomeing a better writer.
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