for Sacrificial Second Chance3/10/2016 c4 Tony McNucklz
Personally I can't read stories where major decisions are made by polls and review suggestions. it just smacks of sloppy writing and lack of forethought for your story, and I have never read a story with no plan that didn't go completely cross-eyed eventually. I'll check your other work, but I can't keep going with this one.
Personally I can't read stories where major decisions are made by polls and review suggestions. it just smacks of sloppy writing and lack of forethought for your story, and I have never read a story with no plan that didn't go completely cross-eyed eventually. I'll check your other work, but I can't keep going with this one.
3/6/2016 c25 Morrison512
Love the story! please continue updating, i know its been 3 years since a update but its never to late to start again XD
Love the story! please continue updating, i know its been 3 years since a update but its never to late to start again XD
2/24/2016 c24 
4Hadrian von Eveschatten
For Ch. 21:
I love it that Harry's fluidity in battle movement so closely resembles Bellatrix's. Who knows, maybe it is the Black blood in him.
For Ch. 22:
"'Don't worry Blaise,' Harry called over his shoulder, 'it's for the greater good.'" That cheeky little bugger.
It's hard not to see Harry and his ladies getting busy by his second year!
For Ch. 24:
Lily is quite the taskmaster. I absolutely love depictions of Lily where she is a realist can can be right down vicious and terrifying when necessary.
For Ch. 25:
I love the scene between Harry and Alice, and hope that they got to down to more than just kissing and groping!
You weren't kidding about people being more skilled in this universe than Harry's original one. Just look at the garlic-smelling, turban freak! Here he is capable of realising fiendfyre, where as the original counterpart honestly was cannon fodder.
Ugh, this is a great story you have written. I'm saddened that you had abandoned it. Has anyone contacted you to adopt this story?
4Hadrian von EveschattenFor Ch. 21:
I love it that Harry's fluidity in battle movement so closely resembles Bellatrix's. Who knows, maybe it is the Black blood in him.
For Ch. 22:
"'Don't worry Blaise,' Harry called over his shoulder, 'it's for the greater good.'" That cheeky little bugger.
It's hard not to see Harry and his ladies getting busy by his second year!
For Ch. 24:
Lily is quite the taskmaster. I absolutely love depictions of Lily where she is a realist can can be right down vicious and terrifying when necessary.
For Ch. 25:
I love the scene between Harry and Alice, and hope that they got to down to more than just kissing and groping!
You weren't kidding about people being more skilled in this universe than Harry's original one. Just look at the garlic-smelling, turban freak! Here he is capable of realising fiendfyre, where as the original counterpart honestly was cannon fodder.
Ugh, this is a great story you have written. I'm saddened that you had abandoned it. Has anyone contacted you to adopt this story?
2/24/2016 c19 Hadrian von Eveschatten
For Ch. 13:
Hermione is such a stupid law-abiding, shrill little bitch. Harry warned her the consequences of choosing dangerous confrontation over breaking a few rules to avoid it, but the bushy-haired bint just cannot fathom not following every single rule to the letter. The naive bitch should get a taste of Malfoy's pureblood medicine to shake her unfounded and cultish faith in authority figures. Harry needs to dump her sorry ass, kick her out of the compartment, and let her get devoured by the wolves.
For Ch. 14:
I do love dramatic sorting scenes.
As for the harem, I guess it's pretty safe to include Daphne. Plot will tell whether Katie and Cho are just cute older girls for Harry to tease and flirt with.
For Ch. 15:
Gah, the HP/DG interactions are so cute!
Hopefully Minnie will soften up to the new Harry when she sees that he is an advanced student and joking nature personality is fun and not malicious anymore.
Stupid Hermione, I hope Snape calls her a know-it-all again and make her cry.
I hope Harry breaks Snape's bones in the near future. No matter what Lily supposedly did to earn his scorn (probably getting James Potter's cock for herself based on your cryptic comment), he has no right to take out his petty issues on her son.
For Ch. 16:
"'The hat was right.' Cho stated. He gave her a questioning look, before she elaborated. 'When it said that you'd do well in Slytherin, it was right. You're very talented at getting people to see things your way. It doesn't help that as you do so, you flash that charming smile of yours, distracting them.'" Has there been more flattering words?
"Once again, the hate in Cedric's eyes was shocking to him." Stop being a stupid twat Harry! How long will it be before you get it through your head that counterparts from different universes usually only harmonise in genetics?! This Cedric is clearly a rapist-in-waiting.
If one is preordained to be on the Greasy Bat's shit list, one might as well do it in style and theatrics. If I was Harry, I would record down each unfair treatment of Snape, rinse and repeat a few dozen times, gather supporting evidence from classmates, and hand in a copy of all of it to his head of house, the headmaster, and the board of governors to get that motherfucker fired for incompetence and unprofessionalism.
For Ch. 17:
Harry is so sweet caring about Daphne that much. And aww, Daphy does care!
"He has an ego the size of this castle," Snape drawled, looking bored. "I wouldn't be surprised if he had Mister Smith clap every time he wipes his as-" ROFL
For Ch. 18:
While Harry's cowardly attacker can be anyone from the large pool of his detractors at Hogwarts, the most visible one so far is Diggory, though I don't know the full motivation for his hatred. Sure his rapey nature is pissed at Cho not wanting to have anything to do with him and instead spending time with Harry, but I don't know is he is a pureblood supremacist.
For Ch. 19:
One can make a solid argument that James and Lily Potter are horrible parents because they allowed Harry to put the entire family's safety at risk. The old Harry was clearly a psychopath, the very least they could have done was to assign him a psychologist. That probably wouldn't have worked though, so they should have done the responsible thing and killed him.
For Ch. 13:
Hermione is such a stupid law-abiding, shrill little bitch. Harry warned her the consequences of choosing dangerous confrontation over breaking a few rules to avoid it, but the bushy-haired bint just cannot fathom not following every single rule to the letter. The naive bitch should get a taste of Malfoy's pureblood medicine to shake her unfounded and cultish faith in authority figures. Harry needs to dump her sorry ass, kick her out of the compartment, and let her get devoured by the wolves.
For Ch. 14:
I do love dramatic sorting scenes.
As for the harem, I guess it's pretty safe to include Daphne. Plot will tell whether Katie and Cho are just cute older girls for Harry to tease and flirt with.
For Ch. 15:
Gah, the HP/DG interactions are so cute!
Hopefully Minnie will soften up to the new Harry when she sees that he is an advanced student and joking nature personality is fun and not malicious anymore.
Stupid Hermione, I hope Snape calls her a know-it-all again and make her cry.
I hope Harry breaks Snape's bones in the near future. No matter what Lily supposedly did to earn his scorn (probably getting James Potter's cock for herself based on your cryptic comment), he has no right to take out his petty issues on her son.
For Ch. 16:
"'The hat was right.' Cho stated. He gave her a questioning look, before she elaborated. 'When it said that you'd do well in Slytherin, it was right. You're very talented at getting people to see things your way. It doesn't help that as you do so, you flash that charming smile of yours, distracting them.'" Has there been more flattering words?
"Once again, the hate in Cedric's eyes was shocking to him." Stop being a stupid twat Harry! How long will it be before you get it through your head that counterparts from different universes usually only harmonise in genetics?! This Cedric is clearly a rapist-in-waiting.
If one is preordained to be on the Greasy Bat's shit list, one might as well do it in style and theatrics. If I was Harry, I would record down each unfair treatment of Snape, rinse and repeat a few dozen times, gather supporting evidence from classmates, and hand in a copy of all of it to his head of house, the headmaster, and the board of governors to get that motherfucker fired for incompetence and unprofessionalism.
For Ch. 17:
Harry is so sweet caring about Daphne that much. And aww, Daphy does care!
"He has an ego the size of this castle," Snape drawled, looking bored. "I wouldn't be surprised if he had Mister Smith clap every time he wipes his as-" ROFL
For Ch. 18:
While Harry's cowardly attacker can be anyone from the large pool of his detractors at Hogwarts, the most visible one so far is Diggory, though I don't know the full motivation for his hatred. Sure his rapey nature is pissed at Cho not wanting to have anything to do with him and instead spending time with Harry, but I don't know is he is a pureblood supremacist.
For Ch. 19:
One can make a solid argument that James and Lily Potter are horrible parents because they allowed Harry to put the entire family's safety at risk. The old Harry was clearly a psychopath, the very least they could have done was to assign him a psychologist. That probably wouldn't have worked though, so they should have done the responsible thing and killed him.
2/22/2016 c2 bigtomato
I know it's a bit late... but I reckon Harry should get the gift of lactose intolerance.
I know it's a bit late... but I reckon Harry should get the gift of lactose intolerance.
1/15/2016 c13 Guest
Pulling a knife on an 11 year old is silly.
Pulling a knife on an 11 year old is silly.
1/15/2016 c9 Guest
Greengrasses related to Delacours is a bit iffy.
Greengrasses related to Delacours is a bit iffy.
1/15/2016 c9 Guest
Patronous charm sending messages is an order of the phoenix thing, it wouldnt be in a book
Patronous charm sending messages is an order of the phoenix thing, it wouldnt be in a book