for Sacrificial Second Chance5/17/2014 c25 PotterinCanada
Please continue this amazing story, I am rather annoyed with the cliffhanger and hope you update this soon, as you have hinted to so many amazing ideas that you will be incorporating. BTW, I went to your profile and didn't see the poll, but I would have voted for this one
Please continue this amazing story, I am rather annoyed with the cliffhanger and hope you update this soon, as you have hinted to so many amazing ideas that you will be incorporating. BTW, I went to your profile and didn't see the poll, but I would have voted for this one
5/16/2014 c19 
1The DCG
Good advice at the end there. So im stopping here. I had high hops for this fic as it started good, and had some good things building up even with the signs of oncoming failhard showing up.
And then there's this shit. One massive chapter of suckass that you try to pass off as potter having odd feelings.
I just dissapointed that i linked this to some friends before getting this far into it. Now i gota go tell them that im sorry, it's not a good read and that the author jumps off a mental cliff later in the fic.
1The DCGGood advice at the end there. So im stopping here. I had high hops for this fic as it started good, and had some good things building up even with the signs of oncoming failhard showing up.
And then there's this shit. One massive chapter of suckass that you try to pass off as potter having odd feelings.
I just dissapointed that i linked this to some friends before getting this far into it. Now i gota go tell them that im sorry, it's not a good read and that the author jumps off a mental cliff later in the fic.
5/16/2014 c25 That one guy who
Was waiting forever.
Well fuck. Guess he really did die huh? Even tho your back you havent given us anything. :/ soooooo let me finish it.
The chimera pounced and incinerated harry.
He closed his eyes the last second and dreamed of his sister skinny dipping in a pool..
What a nice memory.
Burn
Scream
Dead.
Karma looks at harry. - You dun goofed.
Harry- i know :(
THE END
Was waiting forever.
Well fuck. Guess he really did die huh? Even tho your back you havent given us anything. :/ soooooo let me finish it.
The chimera pounced and incinerated harry.
He closed his eyes the last second and dreamed of his sister skinny dipping in a pool..
What a nice memory.
Burn
Scream
Dead.
Karma looks at harry. - You dun goofed.
Harry- i know :(
THE END
5/13/2014 c25 Guest
I've really been enjoying the story so far, your portrayal of harry is both funny and cool. having read what has been done so far a few times I can honestly say that this is one of the most interesting and well written Harry Potter stories of it's type on this website. Keep up the great work and I hope you update soon, I can't wait to see what happens.
I've really been enjoying the story so far, your portrayal of harry is both funny and cool. having read what has been done so far a few times I can honestly say that this is one of the most interesting and well written Harry Potter stories of it's type on this website. Keep up the great work and I hope you update soon, I can't wait to see what happens.
5/10/2014 c19 Guest
This is...okay, I guess. My chief problem with it is that your characterization of Harry is contradictory. Yes, I realize that he 'merged' with a sociopath, but that's not what I mean. What I mean is that the original Harry, before the time travel, was somewhat close to canon Harry in terms of his personality. He was noble, brave, and willingly made the ultimate sacrifice to save his friends.
Harry was then 'rewarded' by a god, given the chance to have his family back and be whole in a way that had always been denied to him. That is the arc for this story; you created it in the first couple chapters.
Now you tell us that this brutal, sadistic, selfish Harry is here to stay for the rest of the story. Truthfully, that's just bad story-telling. You cant plausibly do that. Harry's 'new' life may seem more interesting or badass to you, but it utterly contradicts the Harry whom we met in chapter one, and the notion that this new life is a reward for Harry's sacrifice. You've irrevocably destroyed that Harry, which makes this a radically different story than the one you advertised and started writing.
This is...okay, I guess. My chief problem with it is that your characterization of Harry is contradictory. Yes, I realize that he 'merged' with a sociopath, but that's not what I mean. What I mean is that the original Harry, before the time travel, was somewhat close to canon Harry in terms of his personality. He was noble, brave, and willingly made the ultimate sacrifice to save his friends.
Harry was then 'rewarded' by a god, given the chance to have his family back and be whole in a way that had always been denied to him. That is the arc for this story; you created it in the first couple chapters.
Now you tell us that this brutal, sadistic, selfish Harry is here to stay for the rest of the story. Truthfully, that's just bad story-telling. You cant plausibly do that. Harry's 'new' life may seem more interesting or badass to you, but it utterly contradicts the Harry whom we met in chapter one, and the notion that this new life is a reward for Harry's sacrifice. You've irrevocably destroyed that Harry, which makes this a radically different story than the one you advertised and started writing.
5/8/2014 c25 Kage of the village hidden in the Blood
Cliffhanger into no updating for a year. Gross. Great story. I really hope its not abandoned.
Cliffhanger into no updating for a year. Gross. Great story. I really hope its not abandoned.
5/5/2014 c19 JustPassingBy
Why did Harry not simply imperioed her ? I mean, while at her home there might be some wards against it, till sommer he could always kill her and blame it on Quirrel.
Why did Harry not simply imperioed her ? I mean, while at her home there might be some wards against it, till sommer he could always kill her and blame it on Quirrel.
5/3/2014 c18 5TheSliver-DevilPanda
I like this freakin story to the max, u have everything I want in a story. I am glad to be alive, great story!
5TheSliver-DevilPandaI like this freakin story to the max, u have everything I want in a story. I am glad to be alive, great story!
5/1/2014 c25 4Hadrian von Eveschatten
Harry only has himself to blame. The arrogant fool got careless; for that he is going to get burned. And oh, I love the scene with Alice!
4Hadrian von EveschattenHarry only has himself to blame. The arrogant fool got careless; for that he is going to get burned. And oh, I love the scene with Alice!
5/1/2014 c23 Hadrian von Eveschatten
The comparison to Bella is high praise. What's better than the ability to unnerve, infuriate, and taunt your opponent during a fight?
The comparison to Bella is high praise. What's better than the ability to unnerve, infuriate, and taunt your opponent during a fight?
5/1/2014 c10 revetwrot
Could it be that his animagus form is a thunderbird and not a lightning element phoenix?
Could it be that his animagus form is a thunderbird and not a lightning element phoenix?
5/1/2014 c21 Hadrian von Eveschatten
I'm glad you largely skipped over the training/bonding process between mother and son. To quote a certain meme, ain't nobody got time for that!
I'm glad you largely skipped over the training/bonding process between mother and son. To quote a certain meme, ain't nobody got time for that!
5/1/2014 c18 Hadrian von Eveschatten
Well I haven't given it much thought, I'm not surprised psychopath!Harry's actions have come back to bite new!Harry in the ass.
Well I haven't given it much thought, I'm not surprised psychopath!Harry's actions have come back to bite new!Harry in the ass.
5/1/2014 c17 Hadrian von Eveschatten
I'm all for some consensual familiar fun in the future, but if Harry can't control his psychotic possessive tendencies, then this fic would be too disturbing for me at that point.
I'm all for some consensual familiar fun in the future, but if Harry can't control his psychotic possessive tendencies, then this fic would be too disturbing for me at that point.