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for double wedding!

2/20/2012 c1 jqQMNuwrXyjY3zAyNaAD99ZJKVQwyU
I see a lot of mistakes.

First off, what caught my attention was the title (or subtitle, doesn't matter actually). 'Reborn's fanfic', oh really? Did he write it himself? This question may sound stupid, because, as you know, Reborn is a character and characters can't post anything, but, well, if it was yours you'd write it proper way.

If you didn't get a hint, then just write 'A KHR fanfiction' instead.

From the first paragraph: check for missed commas, possible mistypos, change verbs times etc. You have a huge job to do.

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Both plot and grammar are that bad, that I think I don't have enough time to pint you out all the mistakes. Read in English a lot, that would help you.
2/12/2012 c1 viv
I don't think that Gokudera would cry, but the story was cute.
2/12/2012 c1 6tsukiyo haruna
Thanks. For the review. *.* it's not really my idea. There's more. I'll try my best to upload more from my books! Arigato.
2/11/2012 c1 puripri
I love the fic, short but perfect, ^^
2/11/2012 c1 justareadernow
this is so sweet...

love the ending! especially the names of Tsuna's son and Haru's daughter...i love how you combine their names!
2/11/2012 c1 3EdelweissNoble
It's such a cute story..I really enjoyed it =)

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