for Just Another Wrong Boy Who Lived Story2/4/2014 c2 
13Caerulum D
First of all, who are Albus Severus and Matthew Adams? Are they the same person?
13Caerulum DFirst of all, who are Albus Severus and Matthew Adams? Are they the same person?
11/27/2013 c16 Anonymous
It is not this story that sucks. YOU are the one who suck. Pathetic story and you!
It is not this story that sucks. YOU are the one who suck. Pathetic story and you!
11/4/2013 c10 Taz
Why do you have such big time skips without filling chapters?
They just had their first lessons and then you skipped over to the haloween feast without any real details in between. Also you didn't add any text to suggest it was a time skip other than the troll scene.
I'm trying to be helpful not critical.
I do like harry being a ravenclaw and being friends with Neville and Hermione. :)
Why do you have such big time skips without filling chapters?
They just had their first lessons and then you skipped over to the haloween feast without any real details in between. Also you didn't add any text to suggest it was a time skip other than the troll scene.
I'm trying to be helpful not critical.
I do like harry being a ravenclaw and being friends with Neville and Hermione. :)
5/6/2013 c16 GinaKim
I agree with you. Your story sucks. So is the name of Harry's brother - Albus Severus.
I agree with you. Your story sucks. So is the name of Harry's brother - Albus Severus.
3/28/2013 c1 Fraulein Lover
James is an idiot to name his son Albus SEVERUS.
James is an idiot to name his son Albus SEVERUS.
1/6/2013 c9 princess of unicorns
Please update soon
I really like the story it s really cool how's he's in raven claw and how people treat him it's really quit good
Please update soon
I really like the story it s really cool how's he's in raven claw and how people treat him it's really quit good
11/5/2012 c2 DHIKO
Albus Severus? What a stupid name. For Merlin's sake, Severus called Lily a mudblood.
Albus Severus? What a stupid name. For Merlin's sake, Severus called Lily a mudblood.
10/9/2012 c10 38nevar2547
what a worthless chapter XD there might even be more author's note words than the actual chapter.
38nevar2547what a worthless chapter XD there might even be more author's note words than the actual chapter.
9/30/2012 c15 3Haiogh-Yai
Wait! When did school end? How were things at the Potter house? How does Hermione know Fred? Where is Albus Potter? How was he able to use magic over the summer? When will you update?
3Haiogh-YaiWait! When did school end? How were things at the Potter house? How does Hermione know Fred? Where is Albus Potter? How was he able to use magic over the summer? When will you update?
9/30/2012 c14 Haiogh-Yai
What happened with the key room?
"Hermione it's all you, you're the potions wiz." You forgot a comma and used 'your' instead of 'you're'.
She studied the bottles... You forgot the 'h' in 'the'.
"Now before you argue with me, just consider that this was meant for me. I need to be the one to do it." You misspelled 'consider' and your sentence structure was awkward here.
"Fine. But if you're not back..." Your- possessive, you're- you are.
What happened with the key room?
"Hermione it's all you, you're the potions wiz." You forgot a comma and used 'your' instead of 'you're'.
She studied the bottles... You forgot the 'h' in 'the'.
"Now before you argue with me, just consider that this was meant for me. I need to be the one to do it." You misspelled 'consider' and your sentence structure was awkward here.
"Fine. But if you're not back..." Your- possessive, you're- you are.
9/30/2012 c13 Haiogh-Yai
Where does the first half of this chapter take place? Your story is okay but it would be better id you plugged up all the plot holes.
Where does the first half of this chapter take place? Your story is okay but it would be better id you plugged up all the plot holes.
9/30/2012 c12 Haiogh-Yai
How did they find out about Fluffy? When did they? Why is there another time skip? What happened to make them suspect Quirrell?
How did they find out about Fluffy? When did they? Why is there another time skip? What happened to make them suspect Quirrell?