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8/19/2012 c1 28silent24melody13
Hi!

Wow to tell you the truth this is the first time I read a story with a format like this. Very interesting indeed

I like the way you make each character play their role in the story. It really make the plot more fun and entertaining. The way they interact and connected (especially the way you add the pair of 27xK into this story) is nicely made.

Notes:
... be careful of typos. Really small, but that's what make them hard to spot.

... just a small note; Yamamoto usually say "Maa, maa". Usually the one who say "My, my" is Mukuro. :3

... just an opinion; if you make this all into paragraphs, I'm sure there will be a lot more wonderful and cute details ;D I think you'll do great on that too

That's it, great job on this :D keep writing!

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