for Bleach: The Raven Angel7/6/2013 c25 
1AdvanceRokushiPearls
I though Orihime said that she, Ūryu, and Sado (Chad) were going with Ichigo.
1AdvanceRokushiPearlsI though Orihime said that she, Ūryu, and Sado (Chad) were going with Ichigo.
7/5/2013 c17 AdvanceRokushiPearls
Me again! (xD) I actually like having the cannon mixed with this, makes it seem more realistic. The lemon seemed a little toned down compaired to the previous. Still great though!
Me again! (xD) I actually like having the cannon mixed with this, makes it seem more realistic. The lemon seemed a little toned down compaired to the previous. Still great though!
7/5/2013 c15 AdvanceRokushiPearls
Hate to say it, but you completely left out Ūryu in the earlier chapters... Might want to reupload this with a flash back.
Hate to say it, but you completely left out Ūryu in the earlier chapters... Might want to reupload this with a flash back.
7/5/2013 c14 AdvanceRokushiPearls
One small error in the storyline of this. A hallow's hole formed. The reason Ichigo servived was because the mask tried to form DURING the final encrochment. That one detail throws the chapter off a little, however I commend you for trying to make the scene different from the Anime. However, I dont really thing you can with this part very much. Still love this story though, dont get me wrong!
One small error in the storyline of this. A hallow's hole formed. The reason Ichigo servived was because the mask tried to form DURING the final encrochment. That one detail throws the chapter off a little, however I commend you for trying to make the scene different from the Anime. However, I dont really thing you can with this part very much. Still love this story though, dont get me wrong!
7/5/2013 c9 AdvanceRokushiPearls
Just a few tips, change "Mr. Yotoichi" to just "Yotoichi" (you know why) and instead of always saying "what/why/how the fuck..." I (personally) think it would be more realistic to say "what/why/how the hell..." because thats what they say in the actual anime. Other than that, great job!
Just a few tips, change "Mr. Yotoichi" to just "Yotoichi" (you know why) and instead of always saying "what/why/how the fuck..." I (personally) think it would be more realistic to say "what/why/how the hell..." because thats what they say in the actual anime. Other than that, great job!
7/5/2013 c8 AdvanceRokushiPearls
Just a thought, but I din't remember a mod soul (excluding Kon) in the Bount arc. Was that in the manga only?
Just a thought, but I din't remember a mod soul (excluding Kon) in the Bount arc. Was that in the manga only?
7/5/2013 c6 AdvanceRokushiPearls
I LIKE THIS STORY! :) The lemon was very well written (and VERY dirty ;) ) hope you can make all the chapters this long (even though there are still 29 more for me to read, xD) Keep it up!
I LIKE THIS STORY! :) The lemon was very well written (and VERY dirty ;) ) hope you can make all the chapters this long (even though there are still 29 more for me to read, xD) Keep it up!
4/27/2013 c8 one of none
ruki gets hurt not fatal ichigo gose holow and only ruki can stop him from killing her brother i must say i respeced beakuya more in your work thank you for continuing it i truely injoy it
ruki gets hurt not fatal ichigo gose holow and only ruki can stop him from killing her brother i must say i respeced beakuya more in your work thank you for continuing it i truely injoy it
4/21/2013 c35 3warrior-of-water
I'm loving this story! Although I do wonder how Kisuke got the Hogoku into Ichigo instead of Rukia. I'm guessing Rukia blocked the blow and Ichigo screamed out that she got stabbed. Man, if that happened, ichigo is definitely gonna beat himself up some more.
3warrior-of-waterI'm loving this story! Although I do wonder how Kisuke got the Hogoku into Ichigo instead of Rukia. I'm guessing Rukia blocked the blow and Ichigo screamed out that she got stabbed. Man, if that happened, ichigo is definitely gonna beat himself up some more.
4/18/2013 c35 Guest
OMG what a twist you did! i love this chapter but the end... how can i wait for the next chapter... i hope you update faster thank you for your hard work !
OMG what a twist you did! i love this chapter but the end... how can i wait for the next chapter... i hope you update faster thank you for your hard work !