for When you live in Forks2/26/2012 c1 itsallaboutwhouwannabe
Don't keep putting the A/n in
cause it distracts people but overall
I think you should keep writing this
story because it is really good
Don't keep putting the A/n in
cause it distracts people but overall
I think you should keep writing this
story because it is really good
2/26/2012 c1 itsallaboutwhouwannabe
Don't keep putting the A/n in
cause it distracts people but overall
I think you should keep writing this
story because it is really good
Don't keep putting the A/n in
cause it distracts people but overall
I think you should keep writing this
story because it is really good
2/21/2012 c1 
5LifeIsTooShortEatIceCream
Please don't get angry at me, I mean this well.
1.I find that putting A/Ns in the writing can be distracting, because it makes my eyes skip right to that instead of reading the story.
2. Please put in paragrpahs to break up ideas and between dialogue. It makes it so much more easier to read, and much more appelaing when somebody first looks at it.
3. Just a personal pet peeve, after reading "I suck at summaries" in your summaries over 100 times it starts to get kind of annoying.
4. This idea is... interesting. I think that it could go somewhere, and you are not a bad writer. However, it seems a little too fast paced to really get in what's happening, and you might want to add some meaningful thoughts and descriptions to keep the readers' attention.
5LifeIsTooShortEatIceCreamPlease don't get angry at me, I mean this well.
1.I find that putting A/Ns in the writing can be distracting, because it makes my eyes skip right to that instead of reading the story.
2. Please put in paragrpahs to break up ideas and between dialogue. It makes it so much more easier to read, and much more appelaing when somebody first looks at it.
3. Just a personal pet peeve, after reading "I suck at summaries" in your summaries over 100 times it starts to get kind of annoying.
4. This idea is... interesting. I think that it could go somewhere, and you are not a bad writer. However, it seems a little too fast paced to really get in what's happening, and you might want to add some meaningful thoughts and descriptions to keep the readers' attention.