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29Edhla
This was a good idea for a fic, and you have some creative turns of phrase in here.
Unfortunately I think your formatting, spelling, grammar and punctuation are all likely to discourage people from reading or reviewing this fic, as it makes it hard to read and understand.
Have you considered getting a beta? You can find one using the Beta link above, or just by asking around. Having a second set of eyes to help you, particularly with your punctuation/commas/apostrophes/capital letters, would be a great idea and help garner more interest for your fic :) Good luck!
29EdhlaThis was a good idea for a fic, and you have some creative turns of phrase in here.
Unfortunately I think your formatting, spelling, grammar and punctuation are all likely to discourage people from reading or reviewing this fic, as it makes it hard to read and understand.
Have you considered getting a beta? You can find one using the Beta link above, or just by asking around. Having a second set of eyes to help you, particularly with your punctuation/commas/apostrophes/capital letters, would be a great idea and help garner more interest for your fic :) Good luck!