for True Darkness7/17/2016 c3 
3Majestic War
This is a quaint project-I enjoy it. I can't really think of anything more to say other than good job and keep it up.
3Majestic WarThis is a quaint project-I enjoy it. I can't really think of anything more to say other than good job and keep it up.
7/4/2016 c1 Wizard101central
Hi! I really like chapter one! By any chance, do you have a central account and is your name in central deathysophia os something close? I'm just curious...••
Hi! I really like chapter one! By any chance, do you have a central account and is your name in central deathysophia os something close? I'm just curious...••
1/4/2015 c4 me
Please, update. It's been two(or three) years. This is a great story; but if you've put it on hiatus can you please tell us?
Please, update. It's been two(or three) years. This is a great story; but if you've put it on hiatus can you please tell us?
1/1/2015 c4 Guest
Can you please update?
Can you please update?
8/8/2014 c4 Guest
UPDATE PLZ. ITS BEEN 2 years
UPDATE PLZ. ITS BEEN 2 years
8/8/2014 c3 Guest
Chase XD
I have a feeling he will end up withSophia
Chase XD
I have a feeling he will end up withSophia
8/8/2014 c2 Guest
Ugh hamz
Ugh hamz
8/8/2014 c1 Guest
Nice first chapter
Nice first chapter
7/5/2013 c4 9Lewascan2
Hello! This is really good aside from a few grammar errors. I found it really fun to read. I love how you do the battles. Seems much more realistic. :D Also, I'll be sending you my OC for your story.
9Lewascan2Hello! This is really good aside from a few grammar errors. I found it really fun to read. I love how you do the battles. Seems much more realistic. :D Also, I'll be sending you my OC for your story.
11/16/2012 c4 14Firestorm Nauralagos
'Twas pretty good! :) Be careful with your tense switches; you changed back and forth between past and present tenses a few times, which makes it a little bit confusing.
Also, in that paragraph where you described the cafeteria, I thought it was very descriptive; in fact, almost TOO descriptive! I do that ALL the time. Try not to include too many unimportant details; make the descriptive paragraphs short and to the point, while still giving the readers and IDEA of what the scene looks like. See, there's the key word: idea. My main problem in writing is making sure that I don't over describe a scene. It gets a little bit boring to read endless amounts of description about one little scene, so don't give us every tiny detail.
Aside from those two little things, you did a pretty decent job with this chapter. Nice work! :)
I like the way this plot is going; you're starting to twist things in a direction that I don't believe I've ever seen before. :)
Keep up the good work, and good luck with future chapters! :)
-Firestorm N.
P.S. I might submit an O.C.; Have you gotten any evil O.C.'s yet?
14Firestorm Nauralagos'Twas pretty good! :) Be careful with your tense switches; you changed back and forth between past and present tenses a few times, which makes it a little bit confusing.
Also, in that paragraph where you described the cafeteria, I thought it was very descriptive; in fact, almost TOO descriptive! I do that ALL the time. Try not to include too many unimportant details; make the descriptive paragraphs short and to the point, while still giving the readers and IDEA of what the scene looks like. See, there's the key word: idea. My main problem in writing is making sure that I don't over describe a scene. It gets a little bit boring to read endless amounts of description about one little scene, so don't give us every tiny detail.
Aside from those two little things, you did a pretty decent job with this chapter. Nice work! :)
I like the way this plot is going; you're starting to twist things in a direction that I don't believe I've ever seen before. :)
Keep up the good work, and good luck with future chapters! :)
-Firestorm N.
P.S. I might submit an O.C.; Have you gotten any evil O.C.'s yet?
11/16/2012 c4 7Charmed Mistress
Update! Yes! :D
Very juicy chapter. Hm, whom may be the mysterious five? I will send an OC through PM a bit later. Thing is, will you find him/her acceptional?
7Charmed MistressUpdate! Yes! :D
Very juicy chapter. Hm, whom may be the mysterious five? I will send an OC through PM a bit later. Thing is, will you find him/her acceptional?
9/13/2012 c2 Guest
Awesome story so far cant wait too finish and for the next chapters.
Awesome story so far cant wait too finish and for the next chapters.
9/2/2012 c2 emperorknight
AASAAAAA! Hamz is driving me CRAZY! I WILL CAST AN STORMLORD AND SCARE THE AMBROSE OUT OF HIM! ANYWAYS GOOD STORY XD :) continue!
AASAAAAA! Hamz is driving me CRAZY! I WILL CAST AN STORMLORD AND SCARE THE AMBROSE OUT OF HIM! ANYWAYS GOOD STORY XD :) continue!
6/9/2012 c3 4lanternheart
Chase Hunter is AWESOME. I love his personality. xD It reminds me of me.
Cyrus does have his terrible moments... a lot...
4lanternheartChase Hunter is AWESOME. I love his personality. xD It reminds me of me.
Cyrus does have his terrible moments... a lot...